Comments on 'Pride Before a Fall'
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New! Entered: 2016-03-02
|I sometimes forget that Firecat's actually Otter's age, so my first reaction was: "she should have known better". Oops :) Sorry, Firecat! You told us that she's insecure and wants to be liked by everyone, and that's really visible in this story. And Otters personality is also really here. I like how his competitiveness got the better of him. And yay for Starskimmer for let him ache a little, to learn from it :)|
New! Entered: 2016-02-26
|Ouch, that is one scary situation that could have gone from uncomfortable to horrific if the tribe had been one healer short. I completely get why Firecat was so distressed by it all; and also why Otter wasn't, at first. Magical healers are definitely a good thing to have around, but their existence doesn't always combine well with reckless young wolf-bloods trying to prove themselves XD Good thing Starskimmer is there to give Otter a reminder of how life really works.|
New! Entered: 2016-02-23
|This story is so fitting with Otter's personality! It shows his youth and his competitiveness to get himself in a situation like that! Also fitting that Starskimmer let him have residual weakness and pain ~ the tribe didn't always have a healer and she might not get there in time!|