Comments on 'Don't Go'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-18
|Interesting to see these two at odds! Not that they haven't been before, but it's been them-against-the-world in many situations. It's good to see how they deal with conflict between just the two of them, especially now that they've been together for a longer time. I love that the story ended with the fight somewhat unresolved, but not to the point of them shouting at each other and ignoring each other. Sometimes you just need to postphone a real solution to an argument due to outside factors, and this really showed that. Plus, I like how they both said things that hurt the other, so that neither of them was the clear "wrong doer", at least in my eyes.|
New! Entered: 2015-11-02
|I enjoyed this, and enjoyed seeing Beetle and Willow and the differences between them. I have to admit, though, I was very sad that Beetle didn't simply say "Come with me," which is what I was hoping the outcome would be.|
New! Entered: 2015-11-01
|Great to see the other side of the coin, to see one of the elves who need to stay behind while their loved ones go "play" with the local humans. Willow's reaction is completely understandable, especially so shortly after the winter of the FO sighting. But I loved to see Beetle putting her foot down. Way to go, girl!|
New! Entered: 2015-10-30
|I've had this kind of conversation IRL: "Don't go because DANGER!" Glad Beetle put her foot down. Willow can be tough and dominant!|
New! Entered: 2015-10-28
|I love this scene so much, I really have the scene in my mind like small movie, when I read it. And its such a nice portrait from there relationship and some new aspects of Beetle, growing more self-confident, because I really think being in a relationship with an elf like Willow will lead to this ;-) Its like a small balance. The one finds her own mind, the other gets calmer. And I love to see that both really cares for each other. And my favorite passage and idea in your story is your analogy to Beetles experiments. Thats such a great way to characterize Beetle and her big interest in humans. Its simply true. Perhaps not the only aspect, but a big part of it... |