Comments on 'Beyond the Shore (Part 3)'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2015-12-26
I really sympathized with Raven all through his struggle on the island. It all felt very real and the detail of how he ended up how he ended up helps pain such a vivid picture. Chatterhop continues to be one of my favorite preservers. Very excited for whatever comes next for Raven ;)
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2015-11-02
This one had me sitting onthe edge of my chair. I really enjoyed the conversation between Raven and Chatterhop (although I usually am not too fond of the Preservers). It was so interesting to see how Raven figured out one piece of history by one... and also how frustrated he got by talking to the bug. I can relate!
Great to see how his logic was fed by his hope that one day when he was discovered some of his loved ones might still be alive.
Laura Melis
New! Entered: 2015-10-07
I.ve read through the story parts for this collection and have enjoyed it immensely. Really lays the groundwork for the soon discovery and gives us a connection with Raven. It will be easier to have empathy for his situation.

As for the content, it really brought me into his desperate situation and how the excitement over finding the preserver ended up in gut-wrenching despair of no immediate help. In the end, it saved his life. Looking forward to seeing how this all unfolds!!
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-09-01
This is a great survival story! Exactly the calculated risk taking someone would actually do! Me, I'd get so panicked I'd try to swim back after one good mussel-feast LOL!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-08-31
Can I just say "The stickiness he had found in his hair wasn’t dried blood, but sap — and it had glued his head to the tree" has been one of my favourite twists ever?

And oh the rest, oh wow. Even knowing how this ended, I had my heart in my teeth the entire way through. The loss of energy was really well written, and the growing sense of fear was really good, and balanced out the enthusiastic preserver nicely.
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