Comments on 'Harsh Words'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-03-04
So much character development here! I love how Newt and Brightwood ended up "pitted against each other", since Newt isn't the kind of elf who generally ends up in conflicts - he's more likely to step in and smooth such things over. Very interesting to see how this echos forward between them and the rest of their shared family! Also, I sympathize with Brightwood stepping on toys - had many a LEGO-piece flashback while reading this XD
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2015-11-04
Sometimes it is good to get a reminder that Brightwood can be quite a piece of work... and very harsh and outspoken. I really like that fire in her but also feel sorry for those who are the target of it. I am kinda proud of Newt that he stood up against her so well in this story.
Joan, I simply love your style. And I am really glad you took over Brightwood. She is blooming in your hands!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-09-29
It's really interesting to see in this story that Newt definitely comes across to me here as a young-adult, not at all a child any longer. And it's not just that he stands up to Brightwood, though that's partly it -- it's that her anger at him is leading her to treat him as more of a peer and less of a child, really.

When reading these stories about Brightwood's strong feelings regarding all the humans, I often have to take a moment to remember and appreciate what she went through. It was more horrific than most of us can understand, and therefore than most of her tribemates can really understand, either. And really, that does include Newt. I'm not saying he's wrong. Just that there's a reason for Brightwood's viewpoint that sometimes seems too easy to forget.

But I like that he stands his ground, nonetheless.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-08-15
Ooh. From the beginning this is great, I love how she categorizes Otter and the younger tribesmates into a 'they don't know any better' group. It's a great contrast to how she immediately reacts to the human words. Brightwood is so vibrant when she's angry. I really love how you can string her words together, and make her sound so believable. The little touches of her trying not to fling hurtful words freely balanced against her reactions to the ones that do hurt are really powerful. And the glimpses into her future hopes are chilling, but understandable. Newt is a perfect foil here - he has such strength in his refusal to feel guilty or back down, and the deep emotions under his responses are fantastic to read. He says he showed belly more than Cinder but proves that it no longer applies to him.
Ingrid G.
New! Updated: 2015-08-11
So much here, and all wonderful! I like how Newt is seen as every bit Greenweave and Cloudfern's son and how Brightwood could see the fathers' individual traits in him... Brightwood reminds me of modern people who really would try to poison wells and murder the enemy, even after a war was over. The revenge feeling is so great, she's stepping on toys, cracking them ~ more guilt!... And Newt is such a great therapist, I would pay him!! Wow, nice job!
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