Comments on 'Layers'
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New! Entered: 2015-11-14
|Great to see Thornbow's view on the whole situation. I bet he misses his sister very much. And it is so understandable to blame someone for the loss... even if there is no logical reason. The heart does not follow logic.|
This is a nice insight into Thornbow's mind and how he reflects his own feelings and decisions.
New! Entered: 2015-09-29
|I'm very glad to see this moment, and just overall to see Thornbow back when Honey was first wrapped. I would love to see more of him interacting with his father at that time (I know we've seen a little). I feel that sometimes when we consider the tangle that is Cloudfern-Greenweave-Honey-Dreamflight, Thornbow and Birdcatcher get forgotten, and they shouldn't be. This also makes me wonder how Cloudfern and Thornbow interacted in the more distant past -- what connections they had, back before Honey ever Recognized Greenweave and those complications entered their lives. It's really nice to get sent along the path of thinking about the connection between two elves whom we don't think about that much.|
New! Entered: 2015-09-05
|I'm waaaay late commenting on this, sorry! Having reviewed and approved it, I sort of thought I had commented. I really need to get better at separating 'story approval' from 'actually giving feedback'...|
But enough of my whining! This look at Thornbow and Cloudfern's relationship is so great :D With Thornbow not being the chattiest of elves, it's wonderful to get a look inside his head as well as at his actions after Honey's wrapping. Him avoiding Greenweave and Cloudfern without thinking about it is a nice touch - more instinct than strategy - which shows how he differce from Dreamflight in his reaction. This story makes it much easier to picture and understand what interaction Thornbow and Cloudfern probably had during the time Honey was in wrapstuff.
New! Entered: 2015-08-24
|This is such a great moment to show between Thornbow and Cloudfern. I really like the moment of understanding that passes between them, and how it didn't have to be dramatic but did take something extra to make happen. It's really good to see!|
New! Entered: 2015-07-24
|Layers indeed. I like the subtil nature of this one. The hints and pointers and how it's not a big and dramatic event but a every day life situation that brings up some stuff Thornbow himself hadn't been all aware off and how it's Cloudfern's double-meaning sentences that rigger him to notice it. |
I felt for Cloudfern too. He obviously noticed something as off and guessed what it was but didn't want to seek confrontation.
Nicely told. And it's good to see how Thrornbow did deal with all of it. Usually he seems to stand outside of this.
New! Entered: 2015-07-24
|I love Cloudfern's "double-speak"! Usually people would make note of it, say nothing, and process it on their own. But I also adore Thornbow!! He is so simple, unassuming and direct. Like, "This isn't my 'language', but I NOTICED, and Thank You!!" Great communication between two very different elves!|