Comments on 'Worked to the Bone'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-12-18
I really like how Cloudfern gets so wolfish in his fear. We don't often see that side of him depicted, and it just works so well here. I'm actually chilled just reading the descriptions of him. It's interesting to think about the concept of knowledge existing only as long as the elfin mind is there. I think Newt raises some interesting points, and it was a relief when the tone changed near the end of the story. That last line really helped to dissipate the tension!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2015-11-20
It is amazing how wise Newt is, especially considering his age. I really like this develpment of him.
And while reading this story all the happy, flirty and cocky images of Cloudfern we have in our Gallery came to mind, which are sooo in contrast with him as described in this story. I more and more realize how much this happy-go-lucky guy is a facade, he himself clinges on to to keep himself together. I really, really like to see the depths of Cloudfern you describe so well, Sofia.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-09-30
It's nice to see Cloudfern's reactions here, a moment when he's NOT holding it together and being strong for everyone else -- and nice to see Newt step up to give his elder some perspective. But it's true that sometimes it feels like Newt hasn't gotten to just be a child, that he's had to grow up too fast -- even when he was little, he was dealing with a lot of grief and stress. I hope he can find some balance!
Tah-marien F.
New! Entered: 2015-08-09
Nice story for some insight into Newt's communicative skills. A side of him I did not notice from just a "pictured" view point.

The cute little turns of phrase and insight into both characters view point really kept me reading along - and chuckling at the end.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2015-07-25
Thank you so much for writing this story, Sofia and I apologize for how long it took me to comment on this one.

I like how you utilized the fact that Newt did jump a few generations to point out to Cloudfern that with elves getting as old as they do and having as much time as they do knowledge can get forgotten but not completely lost. Or at least is replaced with something new, maybe even better at times. It dose show Newt after all has a kinda unique perspective on such things (well not so unique for much longer :P ).

It's also nice to see the two interact but man... reading this again made me fear a bit for Newt. He's tackling a lot of emotional stress from people much older than him. It's nice to see the rolls reversed here of who is taking care of whom, but it should really stay the exception. Newt after all is still young and suffered a traumatic experience himself. He really shouldn't feel responsible for taking care of his elders like this (not only CF in this case but also others he showed this kind of care for before. Man what did I do to the poor boy. I didn't take good care of him. :( ). It's kinda sad that he dose push his own grief and fears aside so much to aid others.

Anyway. my personal paranoia aside.. I think this is a very insightful story for both characters. I also like all the little hints at storylines that came before and looking forward to what might become of all of them.
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-07-15
Wow, you can really see Newt's special Gift in communications/relating to other elves! Kind of like the Tribe's therapist! Cloudfern's reaction was very Real, like how a PTSD sufferer might communicate. Love the very long extended hug!
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