Comments on 'Thornwalls and Stone-Throwers'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-18
|Seeing the elves reacting to the humans' siege weapons was both amusing and tense! I like how those two emotions balanced well in this story, for me as a reader and for the elves too. Beetle being thrilled to see a new invention was a great contrast to Foxtail and Rainpace's less than happy thoughts. It's very interesting to see the elves realize the Amber Hunters might not just be thenon-threatening humans at all, despite the elves seeing them as bumbling and forest-weak.|
New! Entered: 2015-11-18
|I think I'm with Rainpace and Foxtail with feeling unsettled by all this. I really like the details and the far-away sketch sort of feeling - I could really picture myself up there watching with the word-hunters because of the descriptive language used. This is a great story that adds a lot of depth to the human colonies here!|
New! Entered: 2015-09-30
|I really like that this story shows that the Ebeans have some teeth, that they aren't just all peaceful and welcoming -- to me, that underscores that they have CHOSEN to largely be peaceful and welcoming of the Baha. And I also really like that they demonstrate their martial abilities in a way that's fairly alien to the elves. It would be one thing for the elves to see them, for example, practicing hand-to-hand fighting, because that would look familiar. But to see them build this very alien contraption… I like that this doesn't just up-end some of the elves' impressions of them, but it also teaches the elves something new. It underscores how much there might be to learn from these humans (while at the same time making me, the reader, wonder if it would be all that good for the elves to learn those things?).|
New! Entered: 2015-08-01
|I feel like this will put a lot of oil in the debate about the humans and how to deal with them. It's neat to see the young members of the word-hunters doing their job even though at this point they seem more like a special scouting devision on the human activity. |
Seems Seaflower did bring in some fresh wind here?
And I agree it's kinda.. calming that some of the naive outlooks on the humans are dampened. Thiese news are sure to raise some voices and it's also neat to see the elves realize, more fully, that the humans did come with a history and maybe foes and friends on their own. It might even be a little too much for someone who only ever knew one life and a straight line of generations who all basically lived the same way, to wrap their heads around something like this.
New! Entered: 2015-07-07
|I agree with Ingrid that it's nice to see that the Word Hunters have been out there long enough that the younger members can go as a solid team.|
But what I love about this even more is their realization that maybe the Amber Hunters have enemies, or friends, or both, that have caused them to have this kind of knowledge. That until threatened, they seemed peaceful. I also loved the point Evervale made... that Suddendusk would want to know about it, and probably try to make one.
I do wonder... what will interactions with the humans, and the trolls, cause to happen to our less developed elves? Will they remain as they are, or will the culture and civilization develop?
New! Entered: 2015-07-05
|As sad as it is but I really enjoyed seeing Rainpace's (and some other elves') naive impression of the Amber Hunters collapse. Now, finally, the humans start to talk business! ;)|
New! Entered: 2015-07-05
|What I like most about this piece is that the Team is all pretty much the younger generation. This implies that, although not elders, they are all mature enough to be trusted to do the job even though they were all notorious for getting in trouble! The torch is being passed??|