Comments on 'The Solitary Walk'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-08
|Woah, there was just so much emotion in this - especially as I knew how it would all end. This story really shows how much life Firecat had before what happened to her, and how loved she was. I feel like I really got to know her when reading this story, and I feel a lot of anticipation for what will come after it! Plus, it made me want to explore what her childhood, teens and early adulthood was like too in more detail :)|
New! Entered: 2015-11-18
|Beautiful introduction! You're giving me wanderlust as I read it. I really connect with Firecat's desire to climb, and explore. The whole time though, there's such a lingering sense of tragedy, from the way she looks over her den before leaving, to her final, unfulfilling farewell to Fisher... It's heartbreaking that it's Chatterhop's enthusiasm at seeing an elf that leads to her ultimate fall.|
New! Entered: 2015-09-30
|This is such a great and much-needed introduction to Firecat. I got a real all-around sense of her here. I like her exploring nature, and the fact that she wants to challenge herself, even when others aren't expecting it of her. And I like that this Very Long Walk did, ultimately, accomplish what VLWs are supposed to, allowing the elf to get to know herself and her limits. It's just that what she learned, won't entirely prepare her for the challenges she is about to face when she rejoins the tribe.|
New! Entered: 2015-08-07
|Wonderful story, Lyn! I actually got goosebumps at the end because of the way you described it. That detachment from what is happening, helplessness and knowing what is going to happen.|
I also very much liked the following line: "...you have the innate ability of all purebloods to be completely open, and yet to keep yourself from getting lost"
New! Entered: 2015-07-03
|This was a great one, Lyn. Very insightful for Firecat. I can't shake off the feeling that the Firecat our tribe will meet will be a different Firecat who left her parents back. She did learn a lot about herself I think and I like the little hints at her ties to her family and her lingering doubts and how a part of her let's go some of them about her belonging into the tribe. |
It's bitter sweet to see her say "This is the last, then I go back home". Chatterhop here .. well I wonder how she'll like the bug once she's awaken again!
Most I liked the sense of her being on her own and capable and the.. for a lack of better terms "largeness" of the landscapes around her.
It'll show how Firecat can adjust to the tribe now.
New! Entered: 2015-06-30
|Ever since I first saw Firecat's bio picture (by Rachel) I was intrigued by the character and by the fact that she was an immortal, too. And I was sad that I would probably never get to know much more about her or even see her interacting with the actual tribe. So since I knew she actually I was really anticipating this. You really did a great job showing us her personality: she is still young and kind of searching her for her place in the tribe. I liked that she is in fact very capable as a huntress and can survive on her own. How tragic that she will never see any of her tribemates again just when she realized how much she missed them and was ready to go home. And let's face it: it was actually Chatterhop's enthusiasm that caused her accident. I am looking forward to her being discovered and meeting the tribe for the first time. For now: Thank You for a great story!|
New! Updated: 2015-06-28
|I love this story. And yet ~ Oh my goodness, stories like this drive me crazy!! "Just one more mountain and then I'll go home". Something silly and random happens. (Almost) certain death. I wonder how Firecat will feel waking up thousands of years later and recognizing ~ no one?|