Comments on 'The Summer Ship'

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Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-09-30
It really is striking here that both women are so unhappy, but for such different reasons. Coriander really was the perfect fit for this colony endeavor, and I can't help but read Seaflower's point of view and think that her attitude will make her tenure a failure even as she is starting.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2015-08-01
Well this was interesting to read. I like how this is told from the POV of two very different women and both are so utterly unhappy with the decisions made for them. I'm sure both would be more than happy if Seaflower got her wish.
Seaflower seems like a product of her environment and the world she's born in. I can't work up any grudge or anger towards her. She seems like someone who knows what she wants but in a very different way then Coriander dose. I hope for her that this assignments can get her feet on the ground a bit.

You managed to create two very contrasting but interesting women here. It will be interesting to see how the new Mata is taking things on and how her family will fit in.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2015-06-29
I am also very sad to see Coriander and her mate go... :( About the new mata: on one hand I find her annoying but on the other hand I can sympathize especially when considering what kind of life style she left behind.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-06-23
I immensely enjoyed this, and am very sad to see Coriander and Thunderchild go. I want to know more, though, about the new Mata and her family. How tragic to have lost her husband only 3 days before. And my wary nature wonders whether any of those arriving are carrying a virus that will spread.

I do hope that Seaflower adjusts. And that you have more stories about these humans soon!
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-06-20
Wonderful job depicting the two women and the opposite personalities and outlooks! The whole piece has exquisite details, and you can feel that you are there!
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