Comments on 'Flight for Life'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-26
|I really feel for our poor High Ones here. The tension was high all the way to the end, even though I already knew what would happen to everyone involved. I just couldn't help rooting for things to happen that wouldn't. Chatterhop is slowly becoming my favorit preserver (well, possibly tied with Mushroom...and Trickleclaw).|
New! Entered: 2015-11-20
|Thanks for putting this story together and giving the Returned Ancestor storyline a beginning, Holly. I really like the flow of the story and how it keeps the reader on edge. I simply love stories from the past, to see how everything was set in place and how much it has changed since then when compared to our current tribe.|
I am also really imnpressed by the fierceness of the trolls and that they already developed "machines" to fight the elves. Clever buggers!
New! Entered: 2015-11-13
|Though I knew how this would end, I was so sad when Oriny disappeared into the ocean. But I agree with the other comments, it was nice to have an insight in the High One's minds and how they struggled with the new world.|
New! Entered: 2015-06-14
|So tragic and well-told! I was really caught up in Oriny's burst of adrenaline to get the cocoon to safety and her realization of how serious her wound was (and the inevitable failing of the adrenaline rush). She tried so very hard.|
Poor Chatterhop in for such a long wait, too.
New! Entered: 2015-06-13
|Nicely done Holly. It's great to see this taking form. You did a good job creating a small window in how it was back in the days of the High Once and Oriniy's struggle at the end was well done. |
As much as I like this though, a part of me wished the exact circumstances about how the High One ended up on that island could have remained a mystery.
New! Entered: 2015-06-11
|Beautifully written! I really enjoyed the glimpses of individual personalities, even though we only got to know them briefly. I like how they fit with the pictures we have of them. Probably the most intricate description was of Oriny's flight back across the water, and of her slowly losing altitude....|
New! Entered: 2015-06-11
|It's hard to imagine the trolls being such a threat. Now the elves and trolls are so secretive, and don't really remember how it used to be! I like how you don't think the glider's wound is a big deal until the initial shock and mission is over. Only when she flies back does it tragically catch up to her!|
New! Entered: 2015-06-10
|Oh wow. That was such a powerful story. It's so wonderful to see the ideas from the forum take on such a strong life here. Wonderful storytelling. And I really love the turn of phrase "body that Befriís spirit had worn" - really puts you into the mindset of the Firstcomers. Beautiful.|