Comments on 'Dressing Down'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-08
|That was one heated moment! Love the emotions shown here, how it's clear Forge's father worries for his future and for the upkeep of their joint legacy; but at the same time my sympathy lies most with Forge, who wants and deserves to follow his own path. Great portrayal of an argument without making either party the "villain"!|
New! Entered: 2015-11-21
|Great to learn how Forge ended up with the Tinkers. I can understand him. And it is great to see how he was headstrong and determined in his youth already.|
New! Entered: 2015-07-03
|I love this Line in particular: |
" — and Truncheon and Cudgel and half a dozen other trolls named after dull, heavy objects!"
It has such a nice sharp undertone the way he says it and the layers of critic are there without being "in your face."
Nice dynamic here between father and son and good for Forge to stand his ground. His father comes off as a very, VERY overbearing and head-strong person. I can't really feel bad for him since it seems he dosn't care all that much for his son but more his legecy. He appears to be more of the dominant alpha male who is used to get what he wants by being agressive.
Forge beig able to stand up to that showes he has a steel spine here! I especially like the wit he showes by turning his father's values and standarts and pride over his house against him. Love this characterisation and grined at the last line.
New! Entered: 2015-06-18
|I am happy for Forge, and sad for his father at the same time. I really liked Forge's final argument, and how it shocks his father for just a moment, but doesn't make him permanently back down, either. The way you write these troll stories just makes me want to read more of them.|
New! Entered: 2015-05-15
|I like this! The logic is perfect! Go young Forge, go!!|