Comments on 'Dreamflight's Crush'
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New! Entered: 2015-11-08
|It was a lot of fun portraying Honey and Dreamflight's relationship. |
I have to say, Ingrid, I think you're doing a great job of showing us that flightier side of Dreamflight - the side that *does* come off as more immature. We see it in action. I do like that she's *trying* to be helpful, and feel badly for her that it goes so poorly.
New! Entered: 2015-05-10
|I find myself liking the first part the most here. We often heard that Honey and Dreamflight are more like friends then mother and daughter but here is the first time I feel like seeing this executed. There is a balance between Honey being a caring mother and a beloved friend. I also like the hints of Honey's very own character here, with the moment she stops to think that she herself could have had Windburn, or at least could have liked him like Dreamflight dose now. Honey is very well portrayed here I think. |
I admit the crush itself confuses me a little. I know love can come suddenly and out of the blue but I still would like to know WHAT exactly Dreamflight finds so charming and swoon-worthy about Windburn here. Don't get me wrong. I think Windburn has a lot of good qualities to him that could make girls and guys heart go out to him, but I wonder what it is that draws Dreamflight towards him.
Dreamflight herself comes off very young and a tad immature here. At least to me. I wonder how Windburn is taking all of that. The ending came a bit sudden. I'd have liked to see more of a reaction from his side.
Still I very much like the first part and it will be interesting to see where this goes.
New! Entered: 2015-05-04
|This is really great - I can't wait to see where it goes next!|
New! Entered: 2015-05-03
|OOooh so we learn who it is! Interesting choice! :) Can't wait to follow this through! I think the story really sweetly illustrates Dreamflight's personality with the focus on the song lyrics and poetry throughout. It was really nice to see her and Honey getting along again too!|