Comments on 'Forever to Practice'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2015-12-08
I like the positive turn this story took. I could really sympathize with Firecat's frustration; it sucks when things seem to come easy to everyone but you. Sparrow helping her find her own talent was heart-warming and I like how Sparrow pointed out that while her bond-friend might be all huggable _right now_ that might not always be the case. Learning to understand the body language of an animal really is the first step to befriending (or at least being tolerated) by one, so it's great focus was put on that here!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2015-11-21
I felt with little Firecat here. Must feel awkward and frustrating to not be able to do what most of the others of is her tribe were capable of.... Now I wonder how she is going to feel when she wakes up in a tribe with only wolfriders... no other Pureblood around anymore. Poor thing!
I also enjoyed seeing the family connections here. Was not aware that Sparrow was her sister, one of the ancestors we do not know much about.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2015-07-12
Hmm... I have to admit, Firecat annoyed me here just a little. ^^' I get how growing up among Wolfriders can be hard when you see they have something you want, but her attitude about it did make me wrinkle my nose.
It' a nice look back though and I am curious how it will be for Firecat when she realizes that there are no more pureblooded elves in the tribe now and if she'll recall her mother's words about how the mix of pureblooded and wolfblooded elves made them stronger.
Spowwor was real patient here and I like the sense of her as the older sister with wolfblood and pureblooded siblings and parents to have a sense for maybe both sides.
Nicely written despite my feelings about Firecat, and a nice story abut sisterhood and a tribe living with a noticeable difference between them.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-06-09
Thank you for this story. It's beautifully written. I love how patient and kind Sparrow is here with her little sister, and how she reminds her that her sending is a gift, and something that she's naturally good at. It's also a neat picture of how different it must have been being pureblooded in a tribe of wolfriders. I guess Windkin could have claimed the same thing, but he was a glider and grew up in the Sun Village. Anyway... I also appreciated the glimpse into wolfish behavior around Firecat.
Mike H.
New! Entered: 2015-05-08
Now that was sweet. I never really thought about how it must be for the young pure blooded elves back then growing up among the wolf riders. Certainly gives me something to think about.
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-05-04
I like this first/second generation story! Poor Firecat! I'm glad Sparrow became her teacher. You can really feel the dichotomy between elf blood and wolf blood before everyone's blood kind of melded together in future generations.
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