Comments on 'Frozen in Knots'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-03-04
The net metaphore was excellent! It really carried through the whole story as a sort of pleasant background noise to the music of all the relationship development going on. I loved getting to see Newt showing frustration and Honey cooperating and speaking peacefully with Greenweave - two things we don't get to see that often, but that clearly happens!
Catrina L
New! Entered: 2015-06-30
Mel you are better at telling stories then you think you are. I like the way you fun side comes out. Give your self a BIG pat on the back and may your stories improve as wonderful as your art work.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-06-09
Mel, having just read through this again, I'm still in awe. I love the play between characters, and how the conversations are never just about the moment, but about the bigger picture as well. You did a seamless job tying Otter to Greenweave, Greenweave to Newt (struggling with Otter), Newt to Honey, and Honey to Greenweave and Dreamflight. This was just a beautiful piece of work and example of family dynamics working in a good way toward healing.
Merry Calliope
New! Entered: 2015-05-09
I can't even express how happy I am to see the Greenweave/Honey/Dreamflight tension being resolved! "Frozen in Knots" is sure an appropriate title!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-04-30
I'm really glad that you returned to the idea of Newt being invested in Honey -- as his beloved brother's daughter, and as one of his fellows who was in wrapstuff. This reminded me a lot of that early picture of younger Newt offering the flower to Honey in an attempt to cheer her up. Both have come a long way since then! But it's good to see Newt still taking an interest and trying to help, pushing her and Greenweave to interact. Both are clearly the kind of people who need that push from time to time, and Newt here proves that he's good at doing so in a gentle and loving but firm way.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2015-04-26
A huge thanks to Lyn here. You really helped me getting this down without overworking my poor mind too much. Your little additions to Honey and how she acts were a big help and I like how you portrait her here. Thanks for all the tips and your patience.
I also give a big Thank you to Cat who allowed me to run wild with Greenweave here. ;)
Altogether I hope this will be a good start in a more peaceful time for all involved. And yeah I too would love to see that dinner playing out ;)
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-04-21
Beautiful! I just love the metaphors woven in here. Newt really acts as a great link between the characters here. I love the way you write all the various family dynamics, and it's so wonderful to see the healing and hope in progress here. You do such a great job getting across complicated characters in a really sympathetic way!
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-04-16
I absolutely adore how Honey and Greenweave are both concerned for their "little uncle"! And that is a dream that you don't often see in humans ~ the "broken" family getting together for dinner! I would love to see how that dinner went!
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