Comments on 'High Climbing'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-07
|Ah youth, when you don't quite know what dangers is even if you think you do XD Always interesting to get a look at the restless young folk in the Holt - Otter seems like he has a lot of excess energy to get rid of and a lot to prove to himself. Mountain climbing seems a good way to work out such things - if only he doesn't take too big risks. We'll just have to watch him grow to find out :)|
New! Entered: 2015-04-30
|I can really only echo what others have said -- I think this is a neat hobby for Otter to have, because it makes him stand out from others in the tribe (and maybe we have others who climb, but we haven't seen it), and it's a cool little connection to his mother's magic. I really liked how the look at this was so in keeping with Otter's usual characterization; he's very much a young male here, pushing himself and pushing at boundaries. But I'm glad the others were there to help him when he needed it, too. :)|
New! Entered: 2015-04-26
|Ohh I like this one. It showes another part of Otter that I think fits him and adds to his character. Like Beth I'm interested in climbing (even though I only did it in a safe hall before ;) ) so this made me both curious and exited. |
I think you caught the sense of the challenge quite well and the feeling of accomplishing something through physical strength, concentration and a bit of foresight.
I also liked the characterization of Otter here. Still a young elf but not stupid. He wants to test his limits, grow into his own and away from his mother's hold but he's not willing to risk his life for it. I like how you walk this line of a reckless, adventures mind of a young adult and someone who dose know the dangers of his surroundings and seeing where he is willing to take a risk and where not very well.
I also like Starskimmer's presence here. All willing to give her children freedom to explore themselves but also a concerned mother. I liked her observation, that Otter has a good feeling for stone. I wonder if a rockshaper got lost with him being born OOR. :P Though I like the idea behind him having a feel for it without being a magic-user. It's a nice addition to his character and I wonder if we will see more of this character trait in the future.
I too did like the little hint at triable interaction, especially with Suddendusk here.
We need to see more of Otter like this. Strong-headed and a growing, learning to be independed youngster.
New! Entered: 2015-04-21
|Oooh, a rock climbing story! I like this! :) Possibly slightly biased from being a bit of a climber myself, but I think it's fantastic to see the skill popping up in the elves. Great skill for Otter in particular - with his build he'll have a huge advantage! You really got a sense of how scary the coming storm was, and it made me grin that because of sending, Otter can never really be that far away from his parents, even up on the cliff!|
New! Entered: 2015-04-07
|It's nice to see this family dynamic that we don't often get to see! Also, very realistic storms on the hill/mountain around mid-day. Have been in those and have timed climbs accordingly IRL. You can tell Otter is a true young adult here ~ grown, but the parents still worry!|