Comments on 'Trust Exercise'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-08
|So much character development here! I feel like I understand Inkstain much better, learning of how much he's been planning since Thumbprint could barely walk and I have all the sympathy in the world for Trickleclaw. But the one that drew my interest the most here was Thumbprint; starting out the story thinking about Trickleclaw as "the specimen" and then feeling hurt my its rejection, ending up glad it its affection. Very interesting to see where this goes next!|
New! Entered: 2015-07-08
|Wonderfully done. I like how much detail and thought you put into these stories and how well you thought through the trolls finding ways to do their research on Tickleclaw without treating it like an object (as far as Tickleclaw is concerned). They really came a long way till this and Primerose's influence is still palpable- I like the detail about how her name is used here. |
It's also a nice way to end on. It shows how Tickleclaw and Thumpprint did grow together Not sure what I can add that other's didn't say yet.
Nice read in any case.
New! Entered: 2015-06-23
|Much as I love the idea of the surprise, it never ceases to amaze me how much is said indirectly, and how the use of Primrose's name constitutes an order. Very well thought out in terms of training the next caretaker.|
New! Entered: 2015-04-30
|The whole idea of the wrapped-egg being a test is genius. :D It's great to know that Primrose came up with it, but I also really like how much Inkstain seems to relish springing it on his daughter. It makes me wonder what his own reaction was, back in the day.|
New! Entered: 2015-04-02
|I know, I was squirming and making faces at the thought of the egg too!! I always throw out or freeze food IRL if I have ANY doubt! Hmm, I wonder how a 1970s Twinkie would fare LOL.|
New! Entered: 2015-04-01
|My favorite part of this story has to be Thumbprint's reaction to being told to eat the 150-year-old egg XD Also, the more I see of Trickleclaw, the more endearing I find the little guy :) |
I have to say I was pleasantly surprised by the mention of Shadowcast, too :) As partial creator, it's nice to see the bug really integrated into our world's history this way!