Comments on 'Tender Skin and Callouses'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-18
|It's so great to see Honey grow and change! The bad blood between her, Greenweave and Cloudfern has run deep, but been slowly bled out over the years after her unwrapping. I just love how this story cements that change and development, making clear where Honey stands with both herself and the former conflict. And that she's noticed how her tribemates react to her, how used they've become to the fighting. Just a great look at "the Now" for Honey on this point of the timeline!|
New! Entered: 2015-03-31
|It took a long while for Honey to finally get over her grudge, move on and make peace with the situation and herself. And in reality it did take long for this story arch to reach this point. I find this especially fitting, because sometimes the character development continues even when we don't read anything about it. Now feels right. Time has passed and Honey has done and experienced new things in her life since her unwrapping. How great to finally see the first steps to a new forming of a family in a different way. Well done!|
New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|I was really glad to see this moment expanded on -- getting to see behind that small mention of unexpected by hopeful cooperation in the scene in "After the Storm". Even there, I felt like it was symbolic of important progress in the relationships within that family, so it's great to see it examined here; and I like that it included Cloudfern explicitly, too. He's *part* of the family, and has to be a part of the solution for everyone. Great job on a short but intense piece!|
New! Entered: 2015-03-28
|This is beautiful, Ellen. I love the metaphor and how sparingly you use it, yet make the point so very clear and it's such a wonderful massage! It also shows Honey from her best side and willing to move on. Wonderful glimpse into it and it really makes one hopeful this mess will finally slow down and resolved by all involved. |
I also like the ending with Cloudfern. And the last bit in general. The idea of not feeling something can protect you but also bereave you of something good. (I think you might have hit a spot here with this massage.) All in all. Wonderful. Well written and.. again. I love the massage and hope in this so much.
New! Entered: 2015-03-18
|If I were Honey, I wouldn't have reacted like she did in other stories. That said, I don't think I'd be as graceful about everything and evolve so much as in this story. In other words ~ way to go Honey!!! I see her transforming into more of a well rounded, level-headed "elder". I can safely say that Dreamflight is very happy right now!|