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New! Entered: 2015-12-18
|Woah, this was loaded with feelings, in the best way! I really felt Brightwood's panic here, and seeing Copper echo a story she herself criticized the first time she heard it was heart-breaking. It's also great to get a look at how different yet supportive Farscout and Brightwood are as parents. The way Brightwood chose to comfort Copper really spoke of what kind of relationship the two of them have as mother and daughter. Very touching!|
New! Entered: 2015-05-20
|This hit me cold. I always thought the worse that can happen to a kid is feeling the dynamic between who is parent and who is kid changing. I'm glad in the end the mother was the one reassuring her child and trying to comfort her. Poor Copper really is in danger to get a trauma not her own and poor Brightwood and Farscout for having to deal with all of this. |
The moment of Copper going back to the story she hated was very chilling. The ending has me torn on how to feel about it. It's comforting to know Brightwood finds strength in the idea of her and her kin protecting who they love, but it also has me worried if she can tell apart when she has to fight and when she has to be just there to protect her loved once.
New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|Lovely family moment, even though it comes out of a not-so lovely experience! I really liked how Copper's desire to "believe" Crackle's story about Lynx cuts against the perception that she is preternaturally mature and wise. She can't know everything! It made her seem very cub-like and normal.|
New! Entered: 2015-03-09
|At first, I didn't know who was dreaming - Brightwood, with the actual memory, or Copper, with her magical ancestral memories. In some ways, though I know the dream was Brightwood's, I still get the sense that it could be both. I also wonder, where Copper chose to use the "hated" fiction, whether there might be some truth to the idea. Though how that would work, I know not. Ah... one can wish. Still, it's interesting to see how Copper tries to comfort her parents, the delimma they're put in, and how Brightwood chooses to answer it. As always, Joan, it's a pleasure to read your stories!|
New! Entered: 2015-03-09
|This made me misty. Poor Brightwood! You've caught the essence of waking up from a nightmare about a very real event! Copper trying to comfort her parents made me almost lose it. I can see how being telepathic is not always a good thing. :(|