Comments on 'A Den of Her Own'
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New! Entered: 2015-11-16
|Thanks for asking me to work on this. It was fun to write! I'm glad that Fadestar was able to come into her own here, in some ways. I look forward to seeing what she does w/ it!|
New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|I too love how this shows so many sides to so many different tribemates, and shows so many interactions, as well. It's not JUST a story about Fadestar, but is about the ways she fits into the tribe, and how that is changing and developing as she gets older, which is great to see. I felt like it really pushed her outside of her smaller social circle and it was cool to see her relating to and being friends with, or dealing with, others. I also thought this was a very good look at Dreamflight -- both her obvious weaknesses, but some of her good points as well! You can tell she really wants to be a friend to Fadestar, even if it doesn't quite work out.|
New! Entered: 2015-03-07
|Lyn, thank you so much for tackeling this weight on my shoulder -- I think I had parts of it lying around for 3 years already XD I love how you managed to include both Dreamflight and Honey, and that we were able to show how both Dreamflight and Fadestar were better off with their own home without losing their friendship. Thanks so much :D|
New! Entered: 2015-03-03
|The different personalities of the elves really shine through here! You two did a wonderful job keeping everyone in their unique characters while showing growth and change - not an easy task!|
I really enjoyed the interactions between the elves - so much emotion in the day to day lives. Dreamflight and Fadestar make an interesting pair, with their different outlooks and edge of frustration that seems to tinge all the conversations. I'd love to see more of their friendship in the future, it seems like the solution they came too here will only strengthen it.
I really loved the Dreamflight/Honey cameo too - really showcases the change between them, and I'm a little jaded but I loved the way little Copper shows up with her simple logic. :D So cute. And I wonder what'll happen with Fadestar and Brightwood, since it seems like there might be a bit of reconciling the intimidation here. :) Brightwood's confidence is a good balance to the younger women's anxieties, and I think they'll both grow into more self-assured personalities.
Really enjoyed reading this story, and seeing all the characters move forwards.
New! Entered: 2015-03-03
|Oh man! What an emotional ride for Fadestar and so clearly another step into adulthood. I like it that Fadestar here is a bit unsure and there is a bit of anxiety in making a firm decision. It feels very real to me to have these kind of doubts and this tendency to postpone an important decision like this. It was a neat way to have her follow Dreamflight's request without making it completely selfless towards her friend. |
The interactions with Dreamflight wehere very interesting to see and also felt quite real. These little run ins with being annoyed at a friend... that's something I can easily see happening and.. yeah living together is not for everyone.
I kinda liked Honey here to, being so direct. I wonder if inwardly she was like: Oh High Once I hope I didn't sound like that, too."
It's also a nice resolution of their dilemma. Fadestar handled it quite well without having to reject her. The sense that she is not up to Dreamflight's self-pity but still likes her and doesn't want to hurt her was handled quite well.
I also loved the last parts with Brightwood. in this story Fadestar had a lot to learn and a lot to decide and figure out. The last sentence did close the story nicely and gave me a real feeling of contempt. It felt satisfying!
Very well done you too.
And Linda, I'm very happy for you. i know this story was with you since half a lifetime. It's good to finally see it printed! :)
New! Entered: 2015-03-02
|What a great story!! You really get a close look at all the characters and how they think in this one! And from a personal level, I love how you portrayed Dreamflight! Her personality and her foibles really shined through! It was also great to see that it was both elves who needed their own den. The way they handled it was like masterful college roomates who wanted singles but are still best friends when the next semester begins. Bravo!|