Comments on 'Peace and Quiet'
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New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|As I told you before -- I really loved this look at Blacksnake in some quiet-time, and that he's able to have a companionable moment with a tribemate. He and Thornbow get along well here, proving that Blacksnake's interactions don't always have to be stern and authoritarian... even when he's still being the advice-giving elder. :) Thanks for this look at him.|
New! Entered: 2015-02-15
|It's great how vividly the tribe comes to life in this story! The noisy scene with the cubs in the beginning is a great contrast to the calmness settling down on Blacksnake whittling and talking to Thornbow later. With so many lively cubs around, it's no wonder he appreciates every quiet moment! I love how it comes full circle, with Thornbow teaching the kids and Blacksnake advising him on it - it really shows that it's true that it "takes a village" to raise some kids, and that no matter how old an elf is, there is always some advice an older elf can give. It's a great piece vividly showing Blacksnake's skills!|
New! Entered: 2015-02-14
|I love how you can get so much into a story for an attentive reader. All the subtle things that can easily escape you when you just read over it. |
I like the many nuances of Blacksnkae you show here; The carver, the Elder and how much experience he has in teaching others (not only kids). I also liked how relaxed and at peace with himself Blacksnkae is here and yet how seemingly easy it is for him to help Thornbow out. The contrast in experience shows in their interaction. It's a great character piece for our beloved Elder.
On another note... I love how alive the tribe feels here and how well you captured what it must be like to have so many young kids around who grow into the phase they have way too much energy. It seems there is another story hidden in this story. I liked the scene Thornbow lamented about. It feels like a real kids thing to do (ohhh the memories of wet towels...). Personal totally unbiased (honest! :P ) bonus goes to the hint at Newt and Foxtail working well as a team together!
New! Entered: 2015-02-09
|I have very little real life experience with children but this piece really evoked the mayhem I imagine and the relief adults feel when able to get away for a bit. I could also envision the scene as a whole quite easily - the kids romping around down below while some adults are in the quieter branches.|
New! Entered: 2015-02-09
|This story is... ME! You captured perfectly the age where kids don't need constant, hovering supervision. And also, that experience of not getting away even when you think you've gotten away! And that this is just... Life!! Love Blacksnake's radical acceptance of it. Also like how the adults in the tribe actively raise and teach all the cubs.|