Comments on 'Lullaby for a Stormy Night'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2015-12-18
I love of this story showcases how Wolfrider memory works - the wolfriders are still elves, after all, and while calling up old memories is tricky that doesn't mean they're gone forever. Also, I love that you pointed out the fact that every pregnancy is different and that pregnancy does bring along a lot of bodily changes other than the obvious (i.e. the baby-bump). This moment in Kestrel's life was so affectionante and it was great to see her as a cub contrasted to her as an elder and expecting mother! The sing was great, I could all but hear it being sung out loud!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-03-30
I've said before that it's always great to see Kestrel as a youngster -- contrasting with the calm and wise elder we know, but inviting us to see the hints of her future self in the child. What I especially liked here was the several ways that Stormdancer showed how young SHE still was, as well. She still had the brashness of youth, but clearly was learning how to deal with her own child. The way she made an effort, and accepted that she couldn't coax Chestnut out of her fear just by encouraging her to be daring, was really touching, and showed her own development as a mother.
Merry Calliope
New! Entered: 2015-02-09
What a sweet and comforting story! I was especially touched that Chestnut/Kestrel could tell her mother was feeling awkward about the holding yet Chestnut did not react poorly and pull away like some might have. Especially since she was already fearful of the storm and nervous about what her mother thought.
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2015-01-23
Such a sweet, lovely tale and so full of emotion! I love the way you contrasted the relationship between Chestnut and her father versus Chestnut and her mother. It's always that way, isn't it? We view each parent as a separate creature from the other one. And what a brave, solemn little cub! You can easily see this little darling grow into the strong Kestrel.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2015-01-16
This was so touching ... I loved seeing Kestrel as a little child, I don't think there are much stories about that time. And framing it with the current events worked great, tying it together so it didn't feel distant. I felt with her so much - it was a hard time for everyone but she was the only one who had to face it all on her own, too!

I could emphasize so well with little Chestnut here, too, her trying to be brave and so ashamed of her fears. That's something that felt very "real" to me. And I felt she really looked up to her mother, in a very different, more distant way than she did to her father, and that's why it was especially hard for her to show her fear to her. That Stormdancer, after the first tries to make her see things her way, reacted so tenderly when it wasn't expected at all was a real treat. And the lullaby is just so, so sweet! Bringing it back to the present, it made the ending feel hopeful despite everything, and I'm glad Kestrel found something to give her strength!
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2015-01-12
How sweet! I'm glad that Stormdancer's response was not what either Kestral (or I) was expecting and that she was able to be so patient and caring to her daughter. Nice that this memory would come to Kestral when she needed it.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2015-01-12
This was a lovely tale. I like the mood you managed to capture here. In the first part you can really empathize with Kestrel's exhaustion an the weight of responsibility she must be feeling. I can identify so well with her way to reason as well.
And the part with Kestrel as a kid. You really got me there. The depiction of a child who's afraid but feels she shouldn't be. The train of thoughts, all the "I must" and I shouldn't" ... I like the interaction between her and Stormdancer and the hints at how different Kestrel's relationship to her father was. You do get the sense that Stormdancer is young and inexperienced with kids. I like how she tries at first to make Kestrel do it her way and being a little pushy but reconsiders.
The lullaby ... just wonderful. I wish I could hear a tune for it in my head. It's a lovely and comforting one and it makes the ending all the sweeter. Thanks for this look into Kestrel's mind as a kid and an adult going through so much and how she finds comfort. It's a very touching story.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2015-01-11
Thanks so much for this, Joan! This was a great surprise to read on Christmas Eve. As I said to you before, I love the look at Kestrel's early pregnancy and the worry and strain she felt during the difficult time period when the story takes place. And the scene from the past was so awesome - finally, there's a story that gives a glimpse of Kestrel's early childhood! It's great to see Stormdancer's parenting style explored - she wasn't the "coddling" type, for sure, but still loved and protected her daughter in her own way (and I've always found it fascinating that Stormdancer was Kestrel's closest agemate, despite being her mother!). Wonderful job here :)
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