Comments on 'Wolfbirds'
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New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|Loved how this was framed on Feather's viewpoint, and how it gave a sense that although she was more elfy than her father, she loved the rough, wolfy aspects of him as a child, and understood important parts of him as an adult (sensing that he would rather be laid out for the crows). Not only was it a cool look at Crow, and at the first generation of wolflings, but it really painted a compelling picture of Feather herself.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-23
|Oh, this was a ride and a half. The first part made me laugh and beam with the joy there - the love and roughness and sensation and fun. Then the second part just about broke my heart. It was wonderful and, I imagine, so difficult for Feather to realize how to best honor her father. Funerals are so often for the living, really, but she knew what really needed to be done and did it. Beautiful.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-13
|Oh, this was so sad, and it had me in tears by the end. The first scene was so beautiful in its ferocity - the description of Crow and Feather with the kill they shared with the crows was so accurate and a good reminder of how our elves hunt and eat. |
The second scene caught me off guard - I'd not considered that as a possible death for a glider. And then, to see how Feather honored her father in death by putting him where *he'd* want to be, and by sharing him with the crows as they'd shared the duck. Wow.
New! Entered: 2015-01-13
|It's so great to see some of the elves bonding with other creatures aside from the wolves. The ones who bond with birds are special and ethereal somehow to me. i.e. If/When Newt dies will he have dozens of owls around him? Nice job!|
New! Entered: 2015-01-12
|This portrays Crow's death really beautifully. I love the image of the whole tribe meeting up and carrying him to the crest to be given to the birds.|
New! Updated: 2015-01-11
|More tales from way beyond. A neat look into the past, Whitney. Crow is very intriguing here. a silent, rough but not unfriendly fellow. |
The first scene was great. I had the images right before my inner eyes (in case of the duck gutting and ripping apart a dubious joy, though :P) . I liked the iteration between father and daughter a lot. It felt very natural.
Crows death was sobering and it shows how quickly a life can end and that the hunt dose bear risks even after the kill (?). I liked Feather's thought of what her father wanted and how the tribe accepted it. There were some very chilling descriptions and it's odd to see the crows and ravens gathering on a corps as something to take comfort in though I understand it somehow. (Ain't there culture who believe, that if, the birds who ate the flesh of the dead bring their soles towards heaven when they fly up?)
Touching look at Feather's relationship with her father.