Comments on 'Into The Smalldark'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-08
|Learning that your father has been a preserver-keeper for all your life must be the troll-equivalent of learning you parent is a secret agent. Quite the shock for Thumbprint! I love the set-up of it, the foreshadowing, before we got to the main event. Clearly a preserver-keeper must know how to fib when need be and how to defuse suspicion!|
New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|We've spent the most time with Thumbprint, of course (and Trickleclaw!), so it's easy to sympathize with her. But I really like how these few stories have established Inkstain so well, and so sympathetically -- even though he isn't unflawed. The give and take here is great; I almost sense that few other trolls provide such a challenge to either of them, as each other. I liked Thumbprint's incredulity, and yet how she brought her learning and logic to bear on the sudden revelations that turn a great many things in her world upside-down. And I liked the reveal that Trickleclaw's attachment is to their family line, not simply to ANY trainer. I remember, when first following this storyline, not quite having expected that.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-28
|This was neat, I enjoyed seeing how Troll family and public politics work. I loved hearing how the task had been passed down in the family without public knowledge, very skillful. Even hiding little bits of training throughout her life without her ever questioning it.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-24
|As usual, it's really intriguing seeing how Troll society differs from the elves with all the political maneuvers. I love the line about signing all the disclosure agreements. Very smart to let everyone think that only they can control the preserver. |
One thing it makes me wonder, are there Troll conspiracy theorists who speculate about what the government knows and is hiding, like with UFOs in America?
New! Entered: 2015-01-10
|Interesting, interesting. You did a great job leading up to this story, Chris. All the rice history surrounding the family of Thumbprint and the names you recognize and their role in Ticklecalw's life up to this point. I also quite like the family interaction here. You get a real sense of father and daughter here, from the argument to the passing of the secrets. The way Inkstain prepared his daughter and worried about her status is actually really touching if not a tad calculating, even if in her best interest. |
Those have gotten such well-rounded, vivid characters that I really got invested in their stories. I'm also really taken by the complex history and politics you guys managed to integrate in those stories. Great work on this. And great to know how Thumbprint became what she is and especially who she is today.
New! Entered: 2015-01-06
|This was fascinating. I love that Thumbprint had been in training all her life, and how she picks up on the game and deciphers her father's lesson and communication. This is a fabulous look at how she came to be Trickleclaw's caretaker.|