Comments on 'Ask Nicely'
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New! Entered: 2015-03-30
|I really most enjoyed this story not only for Honey's continuing development, but for the way it widens the scope of her relationships. I know how necessary it is for Honey to go through stories where her relationship with Greenweave and Dreamflight and Cloudfern is explored and worked on... but it's also just nice to see her interacting with others, being friends with others -- like Nightstorm, and making the start of a relationship with Evervale. It helps make Honey seem more a part of the tribe as a whole.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-25
|Initially, it seemed weird to me that Honey would need a reminder to be polite. In such a small community I would think that it would be more ingrained in them. But then I thought that it probably would be really strange for Honey to even deal with someone she didn't know. It just wouldn't have happened in the course of most elves' lives. It's almost like she has to learn again how to deal with other elves again. I'm glad to see more of Nightstorm and how she took the role of friend, but also gentle but firm teacher.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-18
|It's nice to see Honey taking some steps back into the normal life in the tribe, and it was great how Nightstorm comforted her, but still pointed out firmly that self-pity won't get her anywhere - asking for what you need, nicely, does. And it's always interesting to see how the wrapped elves rejoining the tribe actually means that some of them will be strangers to each other - such a unique situation! I'm glad to see that explored.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-08
|Oh, I like how Nightstorm "knocked" some sense into Honey :) It's great to see more about Honey post-unwrapping and how she deals with the situation.|
New! Entered: 2015-01-06
|Nice to see you trying to fill some gaps and how Honey slowly re-learned to interact with her tribe. Nightstorm makes for a good friend here. Supporting but not pampering Honey or justifying her attitude. It's good that she points out to Honey that people do want to help but Honey can't expect them to jump if she demands not asks. |
It's looking like small steps toward normality for Honey here and relearning some social skills.