Comments on 'Remembering'
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New! Entered: 2015-02-04
|Oh this is wonderful! I'm so glad to see progress being made on Dreamflight. Why am I not surprised it takes an actual knock on the head for her to come 'round? Speaking of the girl that had to leap out of a clifftop tree to learn a lesson at one point. :D Looking forward to seeing how things progress!|
New! Entered: 2015-01-01
|An interesting idea - I'm looking forward to seeing where this new outlook on life can lead Dreamflight! It's good to see her interacting with her uncle and an agemate like Beetle. Greenweave and Honey are of course big parts of her life, but it's good to see they're not all there is to Dreamflight's relationships and Thornbow needs more time in stories like this :)|
New! Entered: 2014-12-28
|Yes this is a vary interesting turn of events. Hopefully this does helpp father and daughter heal the rift between them. I am hoping this family can get there heads on straight when it comes to sporting one another. Good job. Looking forward to more like this.|
New! Entered: 2014-12-20
|Interesting way to kind of "reset" Dreamflight. Like others, I feel that this story didn't quite get into the effects of this pretty traumatic event. Hopefully, it will be a good starting point to expand upon and really show Dreamflight guided by her new perspective.|
New! Entered: 2014-12-19
|I certainly hope this is used to help mend things between Dreamflight and her father. I agree with Beth, I wonder go the rest of the tribe will respond. I can't imagine Honey being happy that everyone played along. This definitely deserves a follow up story or two.|
New! Entered: 2014-12-18
|So... there might literally be some sense knocked into Dreamflight? |
Interesting choice of story. It's very focused on Dreamflight here, but I wonder how the ripples spread throughout the tribe at that time. I'm sure it would have been a really dramatic event for many people!
It's nice to see Greenweave so immediately start to take of her, as if he could forgive everything so quickly when it was needed. I think that speaks to his underlying love there, even if they weren't on the best of terms. The way he leads her gently through her life is pretty touching. Beetle really shines as a good friend here too; and her light hearted chatter really seems to click with Dreamflight - it's good to see the bubble-headed side of her personality really used to effect, with her willingness to say how good it was to see Dreamflight in the now; even if someone with more judgement might hold their tongue when saying such an accident was a good thing! :)
New! Updated: 2014-12-17
|I think the tribe let Greenweave do it "his way", i.e. letting her own memories bubble up. He did, of course, try to send, but it was only as if "she was seeing it for the *first* time". Honey is more forceful and you can see it here by her sending and sending *until* something "clicked"... The two approaches reminds me of Eastern/Holistic vs. Western/Modern medicine LOL!|
New! Entered: 2014-12-16
|That's certainly an interesting story here. It's nice to see Dreamflight being supported by her friends and family and to see that despite what she may think her father did worry and take care of her while he saw she needed it, and so did her friends. |
I guess the only thing I wonder is why it seems people take this so causally. I'd think her father and others would be more worried to make her remember who she really is. I guess Greenweave dose try to do it gently here and I wonder why his sending didn't help her as much as Honey's did. I'd be interesting to know what she did do different.
I hope Dreamflight takes Beetel's word to heart and tries to leave the pain of the past in the past and is able to move on and find peace in the Now.
I'm glad to see more done with Dreamflight. I hope more is coming our way :)