Comments on 'The Many Smalldarks (Part 2)'

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Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2016-01-18
Oh, this just pulls at my heartstrings. Trickleclaw is so sad. I love that it wants to make hats out of everything, but what strikes me most is the wanting to be home, and not being able to find it because its everywhere. :( The ending was actually hopeful, because Trickleclaw might have a friend there.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-01-08
Poor Trickleclaw sure has been through it all! It's very interesting to see how the preserver's imprisonment has been affected by the changes in the trolls' society. And such irony, to have Trickleclaw become captive to a people who themselves escaped captivity - it'll be interesting to see how Trickleclaw and the trolls' relationship develop further!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-04-30
For one thing, I really loved the characterization of Catalyst; he just stands out as such an individual, and a really fun one to read about, at that! But the highlight of this part, obviously, was the escape action sequence. The description of that whole thing was very cinematic, and even cartoonish in a good way -- all of the mishaps were funny, but also made you wince a bit on behalf of the trolls. A shame it didn't work!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2014-12-28
Tickelclaw's ordeal is really gripping one's heart. It's such a neat and, again, personalizing device to show the history of the trolls and it's life with the trolls unfolding.
I love all the care you put in bringing this tale together and what part Tickleclaw plays in it.
The escape and how it came to it was very well done. I liked how much I can see things happening before my eye and how much personality you give every troll no matter how small the part is they have. It really helps to bring Underhaven to life. The writing seems so natural and flowing. Consider me a fan.
I felt so bad for the poor little guy during this and at the same time excited for the trolls discovering so much of their past.
The part where poor Tickleclaw flew about and so confused that it couldn't locate the palace was very effective and a good explanation as to why the Preservers above ground haven't been able to point at where it is either.
It's great how you make me feel bad for Tickleclaw but at the same time I can't dislike these trolls.
The ending was so lovely and charming. It's nice to see that among all the badness there might be someone to make the poor little fellow feel a bit better.
And I just love Primerose's use of all these very scientific terms.
I'm actually hoping that there will be a Part 3!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-12-18
Your writing is so emotionally compelling when it comes to Trickleclaw! I like all the continuing details about the troll caverns as well, and knowing what they're finding and hiding of the palace. But with Trickleclaw's escape attempts I was holding my breath and hoping...! Even knowing what I know OOC!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2014-12-06
My sympathy with Trickleclaw grows and grows. It really is a poor guy, all those years in several, changing prisons.
However, I really like warmer, friendlier note at the end and how you explained the arrival of several of Abode's plants on the planet. Very interesting. It never occured to me they would be alien.
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