Comments on 'The Thornwall'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-26
|I love getting to see Evervale explore her magic! The way you described it was very vivid and both beautiful and frightening. The balance between those two emotions was very well kept here and the ending was a very cathartic for me (and for Evervale too I think).|
New! Entered: 2014-12-17
|I love seeing more about how Evervale's mind works. I do really like how you play with the idea of the thornwall here and how understandable her fears are regarding it. The imagery is scary! Getting ost in something she feels is scary and intimedating? Brrr....|
Therefore I adore the lesson she takes away from it. I like how she learns to see the "beauty" in something she was scared off and how a prickly protector isn't "just" aggressive. I simply enjoy that aspect so much next to all the wonderful details and looks at the Thornwall itself.
But most of all I love to get to see more of Evervale and I agree I do like to see that the wild fantasy is something she sometimes shares with her sister. ^^
New! Entered: 2014-12-06
|Wow, what a wonderful and unexpected desription of the Thornwall and the plantshaper magic!!! This is really great!|
You described so many aspects I have never given a thought: how the TW looks naturally grown from the outside, how the magic might accumulate in it, which makes the plant more than a normal plant. Wonderful.
And, it had also never occured to me that Evervale was a stronger shaper than her elder.
I like! All of it!
New! Entered: 2014-11-18
|I love this - the movement of the story, from fear to something wondrous. Cloudfern is a great teacher, but here, Evervale learns from the object of her fear, which is great. And I love the touch of reminder that she and Crackle aren't always that different.|