Comments on 'Chief of Sucklers'
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New! Entered: 2014-12-12
|*sigh deeply* Oh Joan. I am so happy you are writing for RTH again. I think I said that in almost every story I commented on so far but it bears repeating! |
It's written so lovely and I adore the family interaction here and all the little hints and glints at other stuff going on. The reference to Windburn missing Whispersilk, Foxtail taking up more responsibilities, the friendship between Thornbow and Windburn (and how casual they are together).
It's all so well crafted and I can't help but feel warm and at home reading this. The amusement and humor is great and I do like seeing Windburn as a person not only the chief here. Foxtail was nicely written as well.
And.. my favorite might be the last sentence. It made me grin knowingly because.. yes. That's exactly what's going to happen between siblings! Loved it! (Also liked the hints that the chief will have two heirs and there might come a time that this becomes a more pressing thing to think about.)
So much more to say. I could write essays about your writing but I won't. It's better for all of us!
New! Entered: 2014-11-24
|So good to read a story that is closely connected to the time of Whispersilks death. IMO we have not seen much yet of how RTH's chief dealt with those hard months afterwards.|
All that humor passing around between the three grown-ups was refreshing and made me smile. You also made me wonder what sent question marks feel like. ;)
New! Entered: 2014-11-18
|Foxtail's humor at her baby brother's antics is refreshing. The words "a warmth" stuck out to me, partly because it set the tone for all the rest of what happened. I liked, too, Windburn's willingness to try to sort out the situation, and how Foxtail was so genuinely gracious about the situation.|
New! Entered: 2014-11-08
|I love that you are continuing to fill out Thornbow as a character, and Windburn as well as we get to see more of the relationship between them that really hasn't been much more than hinted at until lately. I also like that we get a little insight into the relationship between Foxtail and Cinder and some thought about how Foxtail would see her relationship to the tribe change now that the chief has another child.|
New! Entered: 2014-11-08
|I love it! I like the "Slice of Life" vignette, which seems so small, yet is fraught with potential foreshadowed meaning! Foxtail will be as much a chieftess one day even if Cinder is chief. I like how Foxtail is seen as being inwardly grown up.|