Comments on 'The Quiet One'

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Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-02-24
What a precious story. Brightwood's line at the end made me wonder whether she was agreeing that Kestrel was a fretful old badger, or that Copper would be all right... or both. I think that Kestrel's concern and insightful observations will likely be helpful to Copper as she grows up. :) It was very nice to see that the cub was eager to go and sit with her mother! :)
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2014-11-29
I love this for one reason in particular. I was a quite and introverted child and somehow it made a lot of people worry. They honsetly made me question myself sometimes and wonder if I had to be different. I like the way Brightwood defents her child but that the thought still bothers her that her child could be unhappy and how kestrel makes clear and can explain her worries as well. Granted I think each child has triouebels and worries of their own. No matter if it's an active one or a quite one, but here Kestrel can empathize with the troubles of a quite one. And it's not a bad thing to be aware of the worries a child can carry to help them if they need it.
I too appriciate seeing some interaction between Brightwood and Copper and linking back to Farscout and the family he had in Brightwood's family.

Nicely written. Looking forward to more done by you Joan :)
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-11-20
I really liked this story! It took so many different aspects of Copper, Brightwood and Kestrel that had been described in their CIS's and really shone light on them. The background setting really weaves the quiet conversation into a lively feeling story and I can almost hear the shrieks and laughter of the cubs. I think Brightwood does a brilliant job of defending her daughter, and I absolutely love the phrase 'born an elder' to describe Kestrel.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2014-10-09
I really enjoyed reading this, and I particularly appreciated how you ran with what was established for Farscout as a child, and had that echo down the centuries through Kestrel's observations. Thank you, thank you! As a writer, that really makes me feel appreciated to see my old work referenced like this.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2014-10-05
Your style of writing is so smooth and your choice of phrases/elvish sayings very unique. You transfer such a wonderful "everyday life" scene of the Holt, here. Glad, you are back and I am looking forward to read more of these in the future! :)
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2014-10-02
This was an interesting idea for a story! I was glad to see more of Brightwood and Copper's mother-daughter dynamic, and also Kestrel's tendency to worry over cubs explored. The shared memory at the end was a great touch!
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