Comments on 'Changing Ways'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-02-20
This was such a great evolution: From her being the eldest, to her being deathly sick, to her waking up and utterly rejecting him, to an easy going friendship, to a crush, to her (now the youngest) coming into her powers and the crush being consummated!! Very well done!!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2015-12-19
It's really sweet to get to see how Fadestar and Pathmark's relationship has evolved through their lives. It's great to be reminded that some elves in the tribe knew those who went into wrapstuff before they did so - though one might know so on a pure fact level, seeing clear evidence of that in stories is a great way to keep that knowledge alive! And the ending scene was both tense and sweet, very lovely!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2014-12-11
This was really sweet. I do like it when romance blossoms out of friendship and I do like the way she developed her crush. It's very believable that she'd fall for someone who is as sweet and caring as Pathmark. They would make a cute couple.
It's also just very neat to see another young adult growing up some more and into their own :)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2014-11-18
Ohhhhh, yayyyyy! So well-written and well-done. I love how persistent Pathmark showed himself as a friend, and it's nice seeing it all received from Fadestar's perspective. What a sweet friendship (and future romance?????) you've depicted!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2014-10-09
I **SO** 'shipping for this pairing! What do we call them? Fademark? Pathstar? ;)
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2014-10-05
Wonderful! I was waiting for this one since Mel's picture of those two in the same furs showed up. So good, to see the complete history of their friendship described here. To see the hard time Fadestar had adjusting to the "new" tribe after her long sleep. It is understandable that she pushd Pathmark away first... and very sweet how she develops a crush on him. :)
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2014-10-01
It's super exciting to see this relationship get fleshed out more! I love how you showed glimpses of the two of them together throughout different points in their lives, culminating in Fadestar's crush finally being reciprocated! I can't wait to see where this is going to go.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-10-01
I really like how you followed their relationship through time, rather than just relying on us to remember that they knew each other when Pathmark was a little kid. We haven't seen enough of Fadestar with those who were her age-mates back then (I'd also be really interested to see her interact with Quick Fang, which as far as I know, she hasn't yet at all), and this was especially sweet -- as I would expect from Pathmark! It's really nice to see that they've connected this way.
Joan Milligan
New! Entered: 2014-09-30
Ack, they are SO sweet, I'm so glad this story finally addressed them - Fadestar has her "new" childhood friends now with the other cubs, but that's hardly to say that she's forgotten her life before and this is one particular callback that's been left to dangle until now. I'm also delighted that Fadestar's crush was reciprocated! However the relationships end up panning out, it's so good to see her get this chance, now that by every count she is an adult. It's almost like her reward for picking herself up and persisting. And Pathmark is just the greatest darling, of course he waited for her, she is so lucky to have had someone with a heart as big as his for a friend for life.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-09-30
Eeeeeee! Ok this just made my night and gave me all sorts of warm-fuzzies. It's so beautiful to see this friendship evolve over the years, and the two of them get over the massive hurdles thrown between them. You gave a great sense of both of their sweet personalities, as well as the difficulties faced when you wake up in a world that's changed and you can't trust the past. I think it flowed really nicely! And the ending!!! Much yay-ness!! :D
Annika K.
New! Entered: 2014-09-24
Linda, I have already told you, I really love the story. It was so lovely to read the different parts of their relationship. At the beginning my heart melted already as they told each other to be always friends. I enjoyed reading about their characterizations, especially little Mouse such a sweet and faithful cub and later Fadestar as a teenager fallen in love,so sweet how unsecure and nervous she was. And at the end I enjoyed reading about the kiss...because we re almost never reading about elves kiss each other.
I would love to see More of that interaction.
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