Comments on 'The Many Smalldarks, Interlude'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-08
|It's so interesting to learn about the beginning of the House of Scholars! And I so feel for Tinderbox! After such a life as hers, trust really can't be easy to give. And I don't doubt there's truth in her worries. The ending moment between Tinderbox and her son was very touching.|
New! Updated: 2016-01-19
|I do like seeing the origins/starting point of this house, and how even when "equality" is called for, there is still the subtle underpinnings of tension and place in society.|
Added: Tinderbox and Tapestry are such a sad Mother/Son pair. :( I wish it were different for them.
New! Entered: 2014-12-28
|It's so interesting to see how Underhaven and the Houses came to be. I'd not have thought twice about it otherwise. It's so neat to see how the houses developed and why. The Interlude here was very much appreciated and I love how you show how much this development was needed in the troll society on the example of mother and son here. |
I also like that you still see the ripples and scars the dark warlord era left on those fighting out of it.
Tinderbox and her son made for a compelling pair to make this history lesson very personal and likable, and gave the whole aftermath and development a sense of necessity. You simply WANT these two to overcome the past.
And Tinderbox breakdown there was so realistic and unexpected... It almost made me cry. I felt so bad for her and her son and I was so touched to see them trying to work through it.
New! Entered: 2014-12-06
|The puzzle puts itself together, piece by piece. ;)|
You showed a wonderful tender and awkward family moment here. Cannot imagine how hard and strange all this reunion must feel for both.
And I just loved this line: "... flushed olive with blood..." Haha!
New! Entered: 2014-09-01
|I really liked that you chose to show us this important moment, through a lens of tentative family interaction. The reason for the distance between mother and son was heartbreaking, and an excellent reminder of what they had fought to overcome. It was really touching to see them wanting to reach out to each other and connect as family. I know this series is meant to show moments in Trickleclaw's history, but it's also just as interesting to get more deftly-drawn portraits of trolls like this along the way.|
New! Entered: 2014-08-15
|Fantastic to get a look at the start of the House of Scholars, and why they guard their secrets so tightly... very interesting! Nice interplay of family dynamics as well; very interesting to see their world so close after the end of the revolution.|