Comments on 'Frayed'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-01-08
Loved this look at Thumbprint and Inkstain's relationship! With the fierce competition that seems to be constanty afoot in Underhaven, I fully understand why Inkstain is pushing Thumbprint to reach her dream. But at the same time, I understand Thumbprint, being only fifteen, wanting time with her friends. A great look at both sides of this minor conflict!
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2015-01-26
I could understand how Thumbprint would be so incredibly frustrated with this, especially after asking around and finding out that they use a different material. I also really liked seeing how she knew that he wouldn't speak to her until she corrected the papers.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-01-19
Inkstain's meticulous preparation of his daughter for her real future is actually endearing in its way. I can imagine she will bless him one day and offer a fine eulogy.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2014-08-23
Well that's a great portrait of an ambitious teenager here. I was instantly thrown back in my own teenage years. The moment when you realize things do not work as you plan and despite your best effort you fail and you don't even know why this effort is even required.
Love, again, the peek into the trolls society. It seems to me most often that trolls life for their profession and I got the same feeling here. With Thumpprint, but also her father. How he never breaks his workflow for her. altogether I feel that parents in the troll community are a tad more of a mentor figure then a loving parent , at least when it comes to the point that the carrier of the younger trolls is being laid out. Could be overanalyzing through. Yet it's an interesting thought.
All in all, a very nice look into this world beneath our elf's feet. And I have to say, it made me chuckle. Mostly the very real portrait of a teenage girl in frustration. I also have to agree with Peggy. I love how her father is written here!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-07-31
Ha! All of the stories we've seen of Thumbprint so far have been of her older self, I think, when she is very assured and controlled, so it's great to get to see her as an impatient youngster! But the ambition and drive is already there. Also nice to see the push-and-pull of her relationship with her father, and that he doesn't coddle her.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2014-07-14
Teenager troll!!! That was a funny read. It was so easy to imagine Thumbprint's exasperation and annoyance and her will to rebell. I still have trouble to wrap my head around how ambitious our trolls are, and how much the troll's society is based on competition and excellence. This story shows this very well.
And I just love her father. I would be soooooo annoyed with him myself if I were Thumbprint. :D
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-07-09
Aw, Thumbprint. I love the idea of a Scholar's College, and the sense of fighting for apprenticeships and patrons. As a student myself, that's rather close to my heart and current situation. It's really interesting to look at the troll society from this angle, and I think that you do a wonderful job of conveying all of Thumbprint's strong emotions here, from frustration, to manic triumph, and back to frustration again. I really like the sense that all the work really will mould who she becomes as she grows up - and here it definitely seems like she could use the lesson in patience!
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