Comments on 'The Many Smalldarks (Part 1)'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-19
|I love how you build elvish history into the troll history, and how through this tale we know what happened to the palace. Trickleclaw is so sad here... :( Poor preserver.|
New! Entered: 2014-12-22
|I loved this. I love to see the progression of the trolls and their history. Well part of it. It dose feel epic to look back at where they came from and to see where they might go. Tickleclaw makes a wonderful element to tie it all together and show us windows in what it was like for a troll in certain times. |
It's quite a contrast to our elves and I kinda love how we even see the elves from a different POV. You can sense the trolls saw them as oppressor which is an interesting thing to consider.
And at the same time you see what all this kicked loose and generally how trolls seem to gravitate toward conflict. It dose make them VERY interesting.
I here and there was reminded of epic movies and I kinda like to see the back and forth between those who want power and fight toward the scholarship and just wanting to find some peace and those who just want to find a way to protect their people. DOn't know how to say it differently but this feels like a story about shifting values and politics over time.
I do love the end the most. It feels like something we do practice to date. Writing down history to remind ourselves where we came from and maybe to avoid mistakes again.
Or I'm overgeneralizing :P
New! Entered: 2014-07-09
|I love the descriptions of the smells in your opening paragraph - what a way to set the scene!|
It was really cool to travel through the different troll eras - what a sense of change and history. It's a really great backdrop to future stories, and the change in name-styles was a really interesting twist. I'm looking forward to part 2!
New! Entered: 2014-06-26
|This was _epic_! I love the history of it all, seeing leaders rise and fall through, with our poor captured preserver tieing it all together. I'm deeply fascinated by the story of the trolls of River Twine and I'd love to see Trickleclaw reunite with his kin someday! Looking forward to the next part!|
New! Entered: 2014-06-24
|It's really great to see this story fill in the history of the trolls, and show how their culture changed -- sometimes really drastically -- over time, as they sorted themselves out. It really gives a sense of a rich history, as well as explaining some of the things that make the trolls who they are today. Really great idea to use Trickleclaw as a throughline for that examination -- and I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next!|