Comments on 'The Smell of Soap'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-08
|With the system of Underhaven being as rank-dependant and status focused as it is, things like this happening doesn't surprise me. Wishing to have it as good as your neighbors is just a natural instinct, I think. And it's not like Quartz is asking Flowstone to murder anyone or even steal anything outright - I can definitely understand his thinking and why he said yes to her!|
New! Entered: 2015-01-09
|Trolls and their society are so complex! It makes it hard, even as a reader, to know who stands where because there is so much going on. For as young as he is, I could imagine even Flowstone being used as a double agent.|
New! Entered: 2014-05-30
|I really liked what a vivid portrait of both characters this was. Quartz is just a lot of fun, but for me, this story gives a bit of a hint of how risky her moves could be. I sense that she's confident in her scheming, but I wonder if she should be. And Flowstone is just interestingly layered -- open and naive, but yeah, also a little easily manipulated by his own resentment towards a system that he seems to have realized too late that he should take seriously. (Although, at the same time, he's VERY young in terms of troll lifespan; it's hard to believe that at his age, he is locked into his role for life, even if he only tried to go about improving himself in an above-board way.)|
New! Entered: 2014-05-21
|Quarz is a clever, clever girl. Exploiting those the system passes by. I like the sense that she knows how it works and uses it to her advance and can sense and use the once feeling unhappy with their place. |
Flowstone comes off a bit different from what I expected from his picture. Well still a bit naive but surely not an innocent kind-hearted guy either. I'd be interested if he actually would deserve a promotion or not.
This could get interesting.
I do enjoy the two strong leading manipulating females here. Thumbprint and Quartz. both seem to have their own ways to get people to do what they want.
Also I really do like the title here. This might be a strange comment to make but I like how it reflects the overall theme, the promise that lies within the image.
And at least-This made me chuckle :
"She shrugged, sending a wave of motion through the bulbous amber pendant nested delightfully above her equally pendulous —
"Eyes up top, friend!" "
New! Entered: 2014-05-04
|I must admit Quartz is very charismatic, as was expected. Love her intriguing mind and slyness! It is great to see how she uses her female powers to lure poor simple Flowstone into her web.|
What a wonderful underground black-market scenario you are setting up here. I want more!! :)
New! Entered: 2014-05-04
|Oh, nice choice for the title. I really enjoyed this story - there's such a sense of intrigue about it, very devious, and yet the casual nature of it really feeds into the sense that it's all part and parcel of everyday life. It's great to see Stoneflow here, and really cool to see Quartz with all that power and plotting and preparation. Really wonderful characterizations of them both. It feels like a great set up story; can't wait to see what happens next! :)|