Comments on 'Dealing with Dash'

Please note: These comments are the personal opinons of members, and do not represent any sort of official judgement, even if they are made by people in club management.  Everyone deserves respect for their creativity; but if you find a negative comment on one of your works, please don't take it personally.  On the other hand, genuine personal attacks are not tolerated and any comment containing them will be deleted as soon as we discover it!

Submitted ByComment
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-06-23
Angie, this line: "They watched the cub in silence for a few more moments. Then, almost simultaneously, they winced as he proceeded to shove a handful of dirt into his gaping mouth. “... Or maybe drop him on his head to see if we can’t get some sense in there,” One-Leg offered." was PRICELESS!! I needed the laugh this afternoon, and that line provided it. :) Thank you. This is really such a great story about an active cub... well-written, and very insightful into the dilemma of weary parents.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2015-02-09
The start of this story was very sweet, seeing how she clearly loved motherhood. She even puts dreamberries aside for it!
I love her idea, I apparently used to have a leash when I was little, didn't take me long to figure out how to get out of it though!
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-01-21
I used to be all judge-y if I ever saw a toddler on a leash. But young Notch on a leash in the wild without baby gates or playpens would be the only way to survive! I wonder how Starskimmer managed when he was three to seven turns old though?? OMG, I bet he could outrun his 'rents by then, too!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2014-12-09
Haha, poor Starskimmer! Not only has she one of the wildest childs the tribe has ever seen as her first cub, but also is she bound to responsibilities as a mother now and cannot do as she likes anymore. Must be a hard realization. But still one can tell she would never ever have it any other way. And I am pretty sure she also finds a way to make it up to Greenweave. ;)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-23
I'm not at all surprised by Dash/Notch having been a child you had to keep on a leash XD Great to get to see Starskimmer and One-Leg's laid-back but also very pragmatical parenting style!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-04-16
This is such a warm and happy scene. I love how Dash can steal the show with a few glances and actions! I really love your way with words here, and the twists to phrases that make them perfect for RTH. My bet is that Dash figures out knots at a very early age - or enough contortions to get out quickly! Cute image - although with Dash I don't think the leash will last too long! :D
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2014-04-15
Notch started early to make his schemes to keep his tribemates on their toes. I like how much personalty he shows even as a toddler. You can see the first hints of the elf he'd become later. Always up to no good ;)

And I like seeing One-Leg and Starskimmer interact with each other and their son. They seem to have such a friendly, joyful bond. Dash had to be a son of them! I can't imagine any other parents dealing like this with such an energy fueled cub. I also enjoyed Starskimmer in general here. She's showing some smarts, and I like how she realizes that being a mother takes more then giving birth and how she wants to be responsible. It takes her past the "Always having her own fun in min" to a character that's more complex then the usual berry-loving, sensual stereotype without loosing it completely just because she's a mother now. I think that's something I really appreciate about her in general. She's MORE then just that.
Lovely story. I really enjoyed it.
It also made me realize I'd enjoy to see more of Notch as a teen or older kid. We saw him grown up a lot and as a small child. The middle would be interesting to see.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-04-11
I love how good-naturedly his parents deal with with a handful little Dash is -- boy are they right, that they named him well! But I had to laugh at Starskimmer's line about "I don't know where he gets it" -- yeah, I'm thinking the source of Dash's non-stop energy is sitting right there next to him, red-headed and not terribly innocent! In this case, the nut really did not fall far from the tree...
Login to add or edit your comments.

Back to Top | Home Page

Home | Characters | Art | Fiction | Resources | Links | Messageboard | Contact | Member Login

[Visual Design: Ellen Million | Sidebar Art: Rachel Vardys | Coding and maintenance: Ron Swartzendruber]
[No portion of this site's content may be used or copied without prior, written consent.]
[Send comments or questions about the site to help@rivertwine.com | Report Web errors to webmaster@rivertwine.com | Page Last Modified 29SEP2012 01:17:35 | Exec 0.014 secs]

'ElfQuest' is a registered trademark. © Copyright Warp Graphics, Inc. All rights reserved worldwide. We're just playing in this sandbox!