Comments on 'Finding Father'
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New! Entered: 2015-01-06
|I'm glad we were able to show Bowflight coming around. I think he could be a very sympathetic character, if more depth and development were to surround him. :) |
Just dawned on me that his watching Willow go under was similar to what she would later experience with him, only he wouldn't come back up.
New! Entered: 2014-12-29
|I liked to see how first Bowflight's pride ist just hurt by the others doubting him and the stability of his mind until he finally see what his depression had done to his children. That is definitely not a very sympathetic character but a believable one that has its faults like everyone one else.|
New! Entered: 2014-06-26
|Bittersweet, which I feel is a perfect third installment in this part of the storyline. Getting to be inside Bowflight's head helped tie all the loose emotional ends together, after only having seen him through the eyes of others. His "reunion" with Willow was heartwarming and makes me curious about what his first talk post-hunt with Mouse was like.|
New! Entered: 2013-09-26
|I'll get into this more when I come to "Lost Son" (working backwards), but... I personally really like this extended look at Bowflight during a difficult time in his life. It may not be portraying him as the most sympathetic character; but to me, that's making him a good character to have around. He's been so undeveloped, it's not like it's assassinating his character -- it's building one, and maybe what it's building isn't perfect, but that's what makes it good. We need people who had flaws.|
It makes me wonder about him all the more. He clearly had his good points, but... it makes me wonder what he inherited from his father, who in the few glimpses we've had of Boar, was clearly imperfect himself.
I do agree a bit that the action in this could have been clearer, since we miss the reactions of Bearheart and Thornbow to the crisis -- but perhaps that's because the story is so tightly from Bowflight's point of view, and in that moment, he is so focused on Willow that he doesn't really notice anything else.
New! Entered: 2013-08-27
|Hm.. I can't help it. I fear I never will be a fan of Bowflight. I see what you two did here through. It was a nice look into his struggle with his own faults even if I thought the rescues was in my opinion a very easy way out of his dilemma. I found myself wondering what was going on in the scene after Willow was kicked into the river and wondered what Thornbow and Bearhunter did while one of the hunters was apparently injured and .. close to drowning?? |
I part of me hopes that this wasn't the moment Bowflight got over it and that it was just the first big step. Otherwise I really would be kinda disapointed because the previous stories seemed to indicate that he was really in a bad, BAD place and here it's even said he considered dying as a good option. I'd figure that one rescue might be a little less to punch him out of it completely. Strangly enough I would have found it even stronger when it hadn't been his daughter. I know why you choose Willow for it, so he can realize he stayed for his children but I don't know.. If he had shown some compassion for another tribemen I'd had set a stronger sign for me.
Hmm well that's my personal opinion and it shames me that it mostly is because I grew to dislike Bowflight as a character . ^^
Still an interesting look into someone struggeling with a lost soulmate. ^^