Comments on 'Lost Son'
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New! Entered: 2016-04-05
|This captured Grief and the accompanying Depression so well! Bowflight taking his first step back into the Land of the Living is so amazing!! Yay for little Mouse!!|
New! Entered: 2014-12-29
|This one made me tear up a bit. It must have been such a difficult time for Willow and Mouse back then. I do understand Bowflight's feelings and depression, but the hurt of his children overweights for me here.|
So glad Kestrel found a way to get to him and to set his head straight again.
New! Updated: 2014-06-26
|This was a great confrontation, it felt very cathartic after the story that preceded this one. While I sympathize with Bowflight's grief, it's horrible to see someone abandoning their children, especially with one of the children being so very, very young, after the loss of one parent. Getting to see Kestrel give her son a wake-up call was both painful and hopeful.|
New! Entered: 2013-09-26
|I really liked this. I know it casts Bowflight in an unsympathetic light, and that's hard, because we have relatively little written about him overall, so it isn't balanced out by a large amount of other portrayals of him. But, I like that it makes him look imperfect. |
As I mentioned elsewhere, not everyone CAN be perfect, and we need some portrayals that give us that imperfection. And it makes me wonder how much of Bowflight's father, Boar, is in him; since we saw Boar sometimes failing to be the best father, too. We get the impression that Bowflight was a better father to his children, but it's nice to be reminded that he might have had flaws, too.
It's also just that I like to see portrayals of elves who lose their lifemates and whose reactions are self-involved and devastated. I feel like, too often, people are reluctant to make a character seem unsympathetic -- yet I feel that's an important possibility for an elf going through this experience, which is far worse for the elves than just the word "grief" can convey. I feel like that's the challenge for us, in imagining how the elves deal with the loss of a soul-mate, and we have to remember that some reactions will be harsh and difficult.
New! Entered: 2013-08-13
|Yays for Kestrel here! I loved seeing her step up and actively take a hand in helping Bowflight through this ugly step of the grieving process.|
New! Entered: 2013-08-01
|I was with Kestrel every moment - wanted to go there and shake Bowflight just for the sake of little Mouse and Willow and herself! It was so sad how he hurt his mother, how lost he was.|
But the end of the story was so nice and hopeful. I loved especially the moment when Mouse called his grandmother and Kestrel first thought something bad happened...and then realized something good happened instead!
New! Entered: 2013-08-01
|I can't help it, but I feel bad for everyone involved but Bowflight. I feel very sorry for Kestrel and all the more for Willow and Mouse but Bowflight I just want to smack. I'm glad Kestrel did that for me in a verbal way.|
You did capture the ugliest sides of a depressive phase very well I think. The time when you are absolutely drowning in your self-pity and pain. And what he said to his mother was just ugly and mean. It's realistic, but that doesn't mean I have to like Bowflight showing it.
He can be glad Kestrel is such a loving mother and that his kids both were forgiving and I hope he spent a good deal of the coming years making up for his behavior towards his family.