Comments on 'Only Some Are Willing'
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New! Entered: 2016-06-01
|I kind of liked this! I can almost see Beetle getting "bored" if such a feeling is possible living in Rivertwine. So of course her mind turns towards crazy (or scientific) experiments!|
New! Entered: 2014-12-29
|Being only 13 at that time I think the approach Beetle used here is understandable. It already shows her interest in exploring and her scientific mind. It was a good step into the right direction and I bet she nudged and bugged the Preservers about their other secrets and for comparative studies for a long time afterwards.|
New! Entered: 2014-06-01
|I can definitely understand why this was so brief -- it was part of the Treasure Hunt, after all, which meant that Lyn did not have a lot of time to plan it or execute it due to the format of the contest. I agree, though, that the concept itself is so interesting that you have to wish it WAS expanded on. Because although I think Whit's right, and it's a case of reader ignorance rather than the elves' ignorance, it's still a really good idea for exploring the Preservers further.|
New! Entered: 2014-04-13
|I like how this shows a fairly young seeker of knowledge trying to understand something. An older Beetle might have come up with the idea of asking each presever all the questions, or to try different experiments - but here she is young and hasn't done all the searching from knowledge she has under her belt in the 'now'. And it's not like there are peer-reviwed articles or schools for her to learn scientific studying from; though asking her elders could always serve her well (but when you want to see for yourself that isn't really a good substitute). And I loved getting to see and compare the different presevers all at once!|
New! Entered: 2013-08-13
|I'm afraid I have to agree with earlier commenters -- Beetle's pursuit of knowledge here feels limited to just a few questions, with no further follow-up. This feels like it should be the tip of an iceberg to something bigger and more complex. Granted, the tribe should have a baseline, practical knowledge of Preservers (such as: how much you can safely ask them to carry / for how long they can carry that weight for / what can (and does?) injure them / etc.), but as an EQ fan, a lot of my basic Preserver questions have never been asked or answered. You skimmed those questions here, but didn't ask any of the questions which would take time and world-building effort to answer.|
New! Entered: 2013-07-26
|A very cute story that proved Beetle's curiosity is endless and that Whispersilk and Flutterby are BFFs. I especially liked the different reactions of the Preservers and how adamant Flutterby was about staying with Whispersilk.|
I agree with Melanie, though, that you could have taken this even further and really highlighted Beetle's thinking and scientific method. It's something that sets her so very clearly apart from the rest of the tribe.
New! Entered: 2013-07-21
|This was an interesting idea, but I did miss a bit of Beetel's systematic thinking in this. To me going with one question to one Preserver at a time didn't really help her to find out much. Now she knows how much ONE Preserver can lift but that assumes that all Preservers are equally strong. I'd have suspected Beetle to be curious if it differs from Preserver to Preserver for example and find out if they ARE all the same in body and talents or not. |
I kinda have to go with Mushroom here. I am not sure she found anything out she didn't already know.
That said, it's still a nice idea behind this and I'd have liked to see it go a little more into depth with a bit more of a method behind it.
But it was nice to see Whispersilk here being the calm voice of reason. I also liked that she made it clear that she has no claim on Flutterby and the whole dynamic between her and the bug.