Comments on 'Tribal Warfare'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-30
Hehe, always cute to see more of the preservers! The sort of vapid narcissism was amusing in itself, but the last scene really made this comedic for me! (And having Mushroom called the voice of doom was pretty perfect too.) Great descriptions of the crows, that really makes me think of North America's west coastal mountains and all the tribes there. The last bit of the story makes me wonder how long Foxsly could keep the game going - and if it ever got passed on to someone like Notch....
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-13
This was a really fun story. I loved how upset Flutterby got when it's headwrap was stolen, wouldn't listen to Mushroom's voice of reason at all. It was great.
I loved the imagery of them flying together and chanting, just awesome!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-21
I wonder how the crows have come to adapt to the preservers over the centuries. It's not like they've ever managed eat one, but they do seem keen on stealing their shiny things XD That musing aside, this was a very funny story! The image of a preserver preening over its "hair" is adorable as well as amusing, and the encounter with the crow murder was hilarious!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2013-08-13
One of the best things about the Treasure Hunt contest is getting to ask your team-mates, once you've decoded a clue, "Oh wow! What can I write about that?" plus "What can I write about for that answer that I don't think anyone else will do as well?" I used to work on a cattle ranch where magpies were always trying to steal my tie-dies from the laundry drying line. That experience combined with the thought of Flutterby's silky head-wraps gave me a fic that pretty much just wrote itself.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-08-04
Boah, mean Foxsly! But a very amusing ending.
All in all it was really entertaining. And I felt bad for feeling only slightly sorry for the Preservers. Poor - and silly - fellows.
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2013-07-26
Congratulations. You almost got me kicked out of Panera for laughing out loud!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-21
This made me laugh and smile. It's such a great "epic" story. I love that you picked up some of the probables that preservers might have with birds and so forth and I love the little drama and the interaction between the preservers here.
I liked Flutterby's determination here and the big attack. And of course the pay off and... the last bit at the end was just the cherry on top.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2013-07-19
This is just laugh out loud funny!!! I felt so bad for the preservers.... But loved the ending!!!
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