Comments on 'Home'
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New! Entered: 2015-03-07
|I can't remember reading this story, but I'm glad that I did now. It's such an important piece of history -- the founding of our holt! I wonder where the Preservers believe the palace is :) And I love how you portrayed our wolfy ancestors, it has also helped me a lot with shaping Raindrop, and I will definitely use it as a reference in future stories. The interaction between the elves, wolflings and preservers are awesome, and I really liked how each voice counted in the final decision of Wolfsister, that, "This is home." Great work :)|
New! Entered: 2014-08-13
|This was a great story! It was a really awesome read. I loved seeing how the tribe interacted with one another, you really get to see a fair bit of their personalities. |
I loved the difference in speech between the pureblooded elves and half elves, it really shows you how different they are.
New! Entered: 2014-04-20
|¨"You think it turned into a mountain?"|
Oh if only you knew, Knifemaker. Not that that is what happened, but it's still a funny statement.
And being a Game of Thrones fan the sentences "winter was coming" is forever associated to that for me - but that's just me, ignore that I'm just being silly XD
I really like this look back to how River Twine Holt was settled. The different voices and motivations of the ancestors were intriguing and the hardships of wandering very evident.
Poor preservers, they must feel so helpless knowing that the Palace is there and still being unable to find it.
New! Entered: 2014-04-11
|I really like that you chose to show this moment, but also that you used it to show how that first version of the tribe interacted. It's so interesting to see multiple wolf-like elves both interacting with each other, and relating to their more elf-ish companions. I like how there's tension there, but little enough that you can see why this is a group that has stuck together this far.|
New! Entered: 2013-08-04
|I alway enjoy stories of our oldest ancestors. What a significant moment!|
But all the time while reading I wondered how the "wolflings" and purebloods got along all this time. Im mean those with wolfblood are so different from the others. It shows even in their speech and I wonder if their sending was any better. It surprised me they hadn't split up.
Thanks for showing us this significant moment of our tribe and how it came the ancestors settled at RTH. I also liked how you sprinkled in some background information about Zerran and Halfwolf and their journey so far.
New! Entered: 2013-07-21
|Ohh such a important moment for our tribe, isn't it? I like the back and forth here between the different POV's and arguments for the place and against it. It also gives us a nice feel of how the little group did handle such things and the gasp here and the between the wolflike elfs and the pureblooded. |
The hardships come across very nicely as well (And gasp. Look at how many elves were around at this time. It's so few!!!)
We all know it was a good decision in the end and as said I just like how these ancestors play off of each other.
New! Entered: 2013-07-19
|I enjoyed reading of how the tribe settled where they did. My favorite parts, though, were knifemaker's stubbornness and the preservers. :)|