Comments on 'Wedding Feast'
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New! Entered: 2015-01-08
|Treasure hunts definitely make it difficult to elaborate on a story sometimes, especially one like this. It *would* be fun to go back and tell tales from different aspects of that day, or to find out if the newlyweds do have a child!|
New! Entered: 2014-12-28
|Wow, I am pretty impressed by the complexity you gave the Bukno-Baha society here. You really fleshed them out.|
New! Entered: 2014-06-01
|Yes, again, kind of a casualty of the Treasure Hunt format -- not a lot of time to plan or execute the story before needing to move on to the next one. I do like how this lays down a framework that others can pick up on in the future, though.|
New! Entered: 2014-03-03
|This is an interesting look at the wedding customs of one of the human tribes. The rituals all sound very interesting but not overly alien and I'm aching to learn more about the human neighbours of the Elves of River Twine. We have so much more to find out about them and their way of life!|
New! Entered: 2014-01-28
|Like Melanie observes, this does feel a rushed -- but we but knowing it was done for the Treasure Hunt explains that. It might be more interesting to come back to this later and see the wedding ritual through the eyes of those who are experiencing it first-hand.|
New! Entered: 2013-07-18
|I like that we get a nice look in some human traditions here and how nicely you weaved this around the grouse. It's truly something different from the other stories and I enjoy learning details about the human culture. This is a nice and rich ritual for the wedding. |
The only thing I really, really would have loved would've been if you'd actually shown us all this rituals instead of just telling us about them.