Comments on 'Tidying Up'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-01-08
Interesting to see the POV of one of the "ground people" during this event on the Holt's timeline. Seeing how different life is for trolls young and low in rank - and being reminded that they too have families to think about - was enlightening.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-11-03
I liked this glimpse of lower-status troll-work. You show Gravel's willingness to do what he has to do without outward complaint, his wish for something better, and his acceptance of how things are. I confess, I did hope he would find... something... that he could keep secret, or trade, but that's just my wishful thinking :) The higher ups wouldn't have allowed that.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-10-01
I like how this gives a rounded picture of Gravel -- his feelings about his low status, and what he thinks of troll society, but also, his feelings about his family, and how he's thinking about doing something nice for a little brother. That gives him much more dimension than if he was just complaining to himself about the higher-ups.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
This was a really interesting little story. As said before you really get a feel for the Troll Hierarchy from the perspective of a low ranked Troll. It interested me that he only thought to stab a higher-ranked troll in the toe, not something more ambitious.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-08-09
A good example for the trolls hierarchic system. So good to see the POV of a low class troll and his thoughts. I likes how Gravel is aware of his low position and how he deals with it.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-18
As already hinted at, I like this story a lot. It's great to see the lower class trolls and the simple workers who have to clean up. Love that it ties in with a moment so significant and showing that while the higher ups wreck their brains and start spinning secrets, the common man is out to do the dirty work.
Gravel also has the jaded feel of someone who only can gaze up to the wealth and glory other's have and bitterly do what has to be done to maintain THEIR status.
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