Comments on 'Grimtooth's Traps'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-01-09
Candlewick seems like an interesting troll to get to know - from a safe distance ;) Her fascination for inventions, mechanics and traps certainly makes her a person to remember, but I fear for any enemies that stumble upon her when she's older.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-02-05
This was fascinating, and I wanted to read more, both about the traps, and about Candlewick. Reading out of order, I know that there is a follow up story, but it didn't include more of what's in the book! If RT and it's trolls were mainstream, Grimtooths Traps would be for sale as an extra!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-06-30
I love the idea that you adapted an old gaming tome to this purpose! It's very fitting for the rules-bound trolls. I really like Candlewick's reverence for the original volume -- even if copies exist, there's just something about seeing an ancient, historic tome in the master's own hand! I also liked that musing at the very end, where the trap depended on anticipating the actions of the elves, and that moment Candlewick has, wondering what a troll would do if confronted by such a temptation. It seems like a moment of insight about the possible similarities between the two populations, though not one she consciously realizes. But it could set the stage for some interesting developments much later.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-01-18
Hehe. I don't know the original Grimtooth's Traps, but this was just fantastic. I really love the atmosphere you capture with Candlewick's sneaky opening of the book. It's quite a morbid fascination, and that balanced well with the hints of Candlewick's engineering interests in it. That said, the traps themselves are eerie and cruel - it's interesting to see so much detail put into "the one that got away", practically having a whole still life built around it. The details are jarring and I hope I don't have to see it in action in the future. Eeegh. Great look into troll life here!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-17
This was such a fun one, Whitney. It was a blast to be around when you came up with this and it was a blast to work out the design of Candlewig with you.
I love the feel of an eager teenager getting something in their hands that they are just craving to have. The joy she feels with each trap and her admiration for the finesse and smartness behinds it gives her such a great character. Only in these few lines I can imagine her and how she is.

Love the idea with the book of traps and I also really loved the intro here. There is this tension and I was sitting on the edge of my seat because I expected the door to her mother's study to open up every moment. I did slip back into the mindset of a teenager doing something they know they are not supposed to so.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-07-15
Oh, this is a nice one even without having heard of Grimtooth's traps before. While reading it I could easily imagine the joy you (and probably Ron) had while coming up with this little story. ;)
I like the girl and it's curiosity breaking her home's rules by unauthorizedly entering her mother's work room. I can imagine the research study she is planning is goign to be very interesting... and entertaining.
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