Comments on 'Deadfall'

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Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-03-09
Oooh... shivers. This one had me holding my breath, even though I knew the outcome. What a terrifying moment. I also like how you included the tale of the others' demise in a similar situation, and how this moment must have been doubly terrifying for Windsong.
Sofia Lindström
New! Updated: 2014-04-15
Ack, such drama and what a cliffhanger ending! Though I think I know how it ended, I still can't help but worry for them. Great description and mood both!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-07-23
Oh, wow, I clung to every word of this story. I really liked that the reader was thrown into the action right at the beginning. I am amazed at how few words you need to create such a capturing atmosphere full of panic, desperation and fear.
It is good to see once more that the rivers around the holt are both givers of life and death.
Now I wonder how this incident affected Newt afterwards...
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-14
Thank you so much Whitney for putting some words to this image! I love how you toss us in the middle of the action and leave us on the moment we held our breath for.
It's a thrill ride from beginning to end and it really captured this weird clarity you have in a moment of chaos.
Poor Newt. He stood on the edge of death far to often for his tender age! And I love the moment he realizes how dire the situation is by seeing the look on Windsong's face. Also love how it ties back into some losses she already experienced under similar circumstances.
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2013-07-13
Wait! What happened next! Did they die? (Sorry, referencing my favorite line from Finding Nemo.) I kept scrolling below the picture to see how they got out of it. Actually, I quite liked how the story dropped us down into the thick of things and leaves us to fill in the rest. It's great to have so much action and I love that you and Melanie came up with such a different take from the rest of the stories and artwork.
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