Comments on 'Forging Gifts'

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Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-01-19
This was so descriptive. I could *see* the details of the forge, as well as the depth of relationship between the sibling pair.
Joan Milligan
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
It's fantastic when a story can do both so deftly - both emotional descriptions and the richness of the environment and all the details. But that's pretty much your signature, Whitney ;) so unsurprising! I think really my favorite thing is the sense you get of the richness and variety of the elves' material world, the many crafts they practice, the images they shape and art they make from observing their natural world, the resources they have and how they utilize them - I can never get enough of that. I love the sheer sense of *plenty* that you evoke with the forge descriptions, when it's easy to think of the elves as really not actually having much that's material. But of course they're a sophisticated culture and this is a good reminder!

(But emotionally, to read this and know that neither Cloudchase nor Sedge have long left... I cannot imagine what these years were like for Stoneback after losing them both. It's an awful coincidence, those close death dates...)
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
This was absolutely lovely. You could feel the love these siblings shared, you brought it through really well. I also loved how descriptive you were about the forge, it gave a really clear image of what it looked like, and you can really imagine all the little details. It was a great read!
Adrienne Willis
New! Updated: 2014-06-06
That silver pin must have been such a bittersweet gift for Stoneback. Because only a year after receiving it, his sister would be gone
and a few years afterwards his new son as well.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-21
This was so sweet! I love the details of the forge and how the story as a whole underlines how important and rare new little lives are for the tribe. Always great to see a loving sibling relationship!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-04-11
It was really great to get to see these siblings interact, establishing that sense of family and community. Stoneback makes a thoughtful brother. But I also really liked getting to see the forge's beginnings, knowing how it will become important to others down the years -- like Ice, young and just starting here, but it makes me think of other scenes in other stories where it's HER forge, and her daughter Sparkle/Goldspice is the one dreaming of working in it someday.
Tah-marien F.
New! Entered: 2013-08-19
I really like the playfulness and love that comes through in this story.
And the visuals are wonderful. I so can see Goldspice in the forge (decades or so later) with maybe a chipped cup or two still hanging and all the worn stone surrounding her projects and tools.
I really hope to do a full picture of her in the forge later-it would mean so much to me.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2013-08-13
Lovely story! You really brought the forge to life here - the descriptions were so vivid. Cloudchase and Stoneback and brilliant together, it's so nice to see the siblings at various points in their lives. I really like the happiness here. And it's so cute to see Ice as a youngster, comparatively talkative and excited! Nice little glimpse into the past.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
The lovely sibling's interaction at the end made me tear up. Beautifully written and very touching! That story makes me want to read more about the two of them and our acestors in general.
Also enjoyed reading about the smith's interior and all these details and accessories the elves added to the movables. Normally I am no fan of excessive description of surroundings but you made me curious how the next box looks like and what decor it wears and who made it.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
Whitney I really love what you did with this. The relationship between Cloudchase and Stoneback is so warm and wonderful and I have to agree with Joanne here. It didn't occur to me until she pointed it out so clearly, but the idea of the "birth gifts" for parents is sweet.

What I also like is the glimpse on all the crafter's work filling the forge. To know the whole tribe worked on something to make Cloudchase happy is heartwarming and i LOOOOVED seeing a younger Ice here so eager to use the gift herself. It made me curious about her relationship with Cloudchase.
Also it's neat to know how the forge came into existence and why.
And the moment Cloudchase returns the a gift on her own to her brother was so sweet and a little more intimate but just as powerful.
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
This is sweet. It's always so great getting to know the ancestors, getting a feel for their interactions and places in the tribe more than what little we get in the CIS. That was a really great gift that Stoneback gave his sister, and it was nice to see it reciprocated. I also really like this idea of giving gifts to the parents at a birth in return for the gift that they are giving the tribe. It conveys how important the new members are to the life of the tribe. Neat twist on birthday presents!
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