Comments on 'Doing it in Your Sleep'

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Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-01-18
"Wax on. Wax off."
He's a great teacher!
This really drew me in, especially in the descriptions of the stone. I think it was an interesting glimpse of how rock shaping works... And this makes me wonder if agate taught her daughter the same way.
Tah-marien F.
New! Entered: 2014-12-30
"a tiny bit of her Father's stubbornness seeping out of her mouth"
Wow. So true; and yet we see an new side to her father - that of teacher.

Way cute story and I really was drawn into the Stone. It had a part to play and every stone shaper learns that.Very Nice.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-15
This was a great look into Agate's world, and her relationship with her father. I loved seeing that she wasn't as patient as Stoneback is, and wants to learn more without perfecting what she had already done. Stoneback seems to make a good teacher, he seems to be no nonsense but patient. I really enjoyed reading this story.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-06-01
I particularly like this look at Agate, because I feel like understanding her is a puzzle piece needed for understanding Starskimmer. This is a great contrast between Stoneback and his daughter -- he seems much steadier and more patient, while she seems impulsive and fiery. That's a great hint at the rest of her personality, and really shows us the seeds of her daughter's passionate nature. So, really good job, here, not only showing us a father-daughter interaction we've never seen, but for me anyway, making it so that it feels connected to the current generation.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-14
"Until you can do it in your sleep."
Man, teachers who say that kind of stuff are usually the best and the worst at the same time. I completely get where Stoneback is coming from with that line, but I also get Agate's frustration at not getting to move on to the next step right away. Interesting look into how rockshaping magic works and great father/daughter moment!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
I like this exploration of a father/daughter relationship here. I, too, imagined him being a funny and easy around with type of elf, but the sterness during teaching lessons suits Stoneback well. Also liked your take on and understanding of rock shaping magic and how it works.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
I really really like this one. The father / daughter dynamic is great and the lesson is one not only a shaper should learn. I like the down to earth attribute of Stoneback here and the frustration of Agath. They play off each other very well.
But really the most I like this lesson she gets. You have to know something before you can change it and you can't force it on something. That's such a great, great thing.
Love how you two managed to "visualize" it too. Sweet stuff and your writing works great together!
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
I always find it interesting to see how the use of magic is portrayed from the understanding of the magic user. My thought is that to be a rock or tree shaper you would really need to be aware of each molecule, so I like Stoneback's advice of getting to know the stone. It's also great that Agate does have her father to be her mentor. I like that you included that they do have a good relationship and he's not always a driven task-master.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2013-07-10
Ah, Stoneback makes such a great, if stern, teacher! I loved the interaction between father and daughter and the teaching/learning of the rockshaping magic. :) Their stubborn personalities really did warm up the story nicely with a bit of light friction, without making the overall feel uncomfortable between them. :) I really liked how Stoneback was unwilling to simply hand his daughter all the answers, yet he does come across as patient in his own way. ;)
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