Comments on 'Grandfathers'

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Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-04-30
I really like how many layers you packed into this short piece. I love the moment at the beginning, with the misunderstanding about which grandfather Shimmer is asking about, and the slight sense of hurt that Dagger seems to feel. For one thing -- that seemed like such a typical innocent-child action (to ask for "a story about grandfather" and just assume her father will know which one she would rather hear about). And for another, it hints to me about other dimensions to Dagger, whom we don't know very well. Did he ever feel jealousy towards his tribemates who could do magic? Which included his own Recognized, and Shimmer's mother, Agate. Is that why he's a bit hurt? Or is it only because he would welcome the chance to talk about his father, and perhaps Stoneback -- having been a bit more "larger than life" -- is the one who is more often talked about? Interesting stuff there.
Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-03-25
I like how Dagger knew very detailed, almost intimate history about the two elves which "might not matter" in a larger context. He knew that they were carving buddies and that Huntwise gave Stoneback his first toy, even though he didn't know Stoneback at all.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-02-28
It was interesting studying more about Starskimmer's family history and realizing how death can interrupt relationships that might have been.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-12-14
I liked this story, seeing Shimmer and her father interact was really sweet. I love that she noticed her father was in a way hurt by the fact that she was asking about Stoneback, and not his own father. She was a smart cub to think of asking for a story of both of them, and it was a great lesson to the little cub.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-21
The elves' lifespan combned with their way of reproduction as well as risky lives lead to some intersting family trees! I love how that was shown here, as well as how there actaully was some hurt from the father's side when it wasn't his father his cub wanted to hear about. Just because you're an adult it doesn't mean small things don't hurt anymore.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
What a lovely story. It is great how much history and background knowdledge you put into this little story. Starskimmer as a child was very cute and I enjoyed reading it.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
That was a cute little story. It's nice to see Starskimmer with her dad here, eager to learn about her family. It was also nice to look into the past of characters just living their everyday life. The image of Stoneback and Huntwise craving together and sharing a friendship and hobby is a neat bit of characterization on both.
The only thing that made me go "huh" was why Dagger would be hurt by Shimmer asking about Stoneback instead of Huuntwise.
Other than that. Yeah, a really cute little look on a small Starskimmer.
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2013-07-11
What I love about this piece is that it really highlights the long lives of the elves and how even close relations can be really separated in time. They don't fit into generations in the sense humans are used to. I love seeing Skimmer's interaction with her father, and that we also get a glimpse of the relationship between Huntwise and Stoneback.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2013-07-10
Adorable! I really liked what Dagger said about those two being more than just their jobs. I also really loved seeing the idea that how Starskimmer's attitude of how she values each individual in the tribe for who they are was in a way passed down to her, at least in part, from her father. :)
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