Comments on 'Into Hot Water'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2016-01-08
Oh, very intriguing! Having Quartz underestimate Tunnelrat for her seemingly lower status is a very interesting reflection of how Underhaven works in the eyes of higher ranked, young trolls. It's interesting to see how a greedy troll works within the framework of the Underhaven trolls' culture, so much less focused on gold treasures than the trolls of canon. And I can't wait to read more of Tunnelrat's secret work for Ingot!
Lea R.
New! Entered: 2015-12-09
Oh, the troll society is just so full of intrigues; I love it! Tunnelrat is easily a new favourite character for me, I love how the story turned out in the end. And Quartz is interesting too, I get it, that her love for jewellery and other "nice" things is not so very respectable for these trolls?
(And I still think that the caste system in Underhaven is very harsh... But it makes for interesting stories!)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2015-01-08
Ooooh, the intrigue. I definitely want to read more and more about these trolls! I'll have to go back and read it all in order chronologically.

My favorite part was the second part, where we see the truth about Tunnelrat! :) I find myself cheering her on, and looking forward to what comes next.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2013-09-26
I really LIKE that Quartz here is portrayed as a bit different from others in troll society, in her quest for material and physical pleasures. Even if that's not the main thrust of troll society, it makes sense to me that it would still be the focus of some of them. And here, it dovetails nicely with the whole "black market" concept you've got going on. What I like most about that, actually, is the idea that it fits both "types". It appeals to trolls who have a sort of "hoarding" instinct, but it also apeals to the trolls who fit in with the way their society prizes knowledge and thus, secrets. And, I do like how the ending turns the tables on our expectations a bit, with Quartz (seemingly?) being none the wiser.
Chris T.
New! Entered: 2013-08-19
Due to an error on my part, Quartz's visual description was left out of the last draft sent in to the SAT. It has been restored, as is now the second paragraph of the piece.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-07-10
Oh what a tangled web we weave
When first we practice to deceive.

So much is going on here and I LOVE how you manage to give these trolls such distinctive personalities. Quartz was enjoyably full of herself and decadent and the whole way you wrote it looked as if it must have been a ton of fun to write.
I also really love the way it ends and how they seemed to take advance of the haughtiness of the upper class. ANd at the last sentence I couldn't help but grin. I wonder what he's planning and .. well he's mighty clever that boy!

Great great stuff! Love all the intrigue and inner workings of that society. Looking forward to more of this.
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