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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-03-21
That's what you get when you live for hundreds of years in a small tribe with a bald head... Someone will try to paint it!!! OMG!! ... And poor Sparkle! Well, at least this story will go in her Favorite Memory folder. She won't take a loved one's attention for granted! Sad.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2015-01-29
That game is awful! I would be furious if people bet whether or not they could paint my freaking head! Ooooh so calculated on Ice's part, I love it! Not that you should use your children. Poor girl feels like she has to work for her mother's affection.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2014-11-18
I agree... I'd despise the game, too! And I wouldn't blame Ice at all for responding in threatened violence! The last line was sad... but I think it also shows that children are in many ways often more accepting of their parents than they are as adults. They know that someone is quirky, but aren't so prone to setting an expectation. :) Sparkle seems to be the kind of kiddo to just accept someone, and want to be around them. I did think that the comment about Sparkle and Ice having some more in common than just the forge was neat! :) (Funny, too, how even though I wrote it, I felt like just another reader in reading it... :) Guess that's what happens w/ time away from a story)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-22
I love getting a look at this mother/daughter relationship! Such a bittersweet story, having to help your mother trick others to get to "spend time with her" i.e. watch her work. It's lucky they at least share the love of the forge and it was interesting to see how this differenciated this parent-child relationship from Ice's relationship with Farscout.
Amy Chandler
New! Entered: 2013-06-06
Kudos to you Lyn for taking a thought mentioned on the message board and turning it into a believable game. I can completely understand why Ice would hate it. But I can also see why the tricksters would want to try it. Good for Sparkle for winning on her own!
Catrina L
New! Entered: 2013-06-02
Yes where the fun in winning the game if the other parson lets you cheat. Sparkel wanted to win by kind of not cheating. She did ask for her fathers help but she did it on her oun. That says alot about her as a child. Good to know not even Ice can not resist Starskimmers "charms":). It is a vary cute and sweet story.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2013-06-02
I like this look into Ice's personality, and the relationship between Sparkle and her mother! It's interesting that Ice chooses to play the game on her own terms, and then Sparkle also (due to being related to Ice, I'm sure!) also chooses to play her way so she is satisfied with the outcome, too!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2013-06-01
Ice is such a fascinating character. I love how it's revealed that the only reason she "lets" the pranking attempts continue is because she wants to get something out of it. It's great, too, to see that Sparkle wants to accomplish it on her own and not because her mother lets her do it. I agree that I found the last line a little bit sad, though I'm not sure if it was meant to be. Great portrayal of this atypical mother-daughter relationship.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-06-01
The last sentence in this was really cute and sad at the same time. A neat little story but I can see why Ice hated that game. I frankly would too. There is a bit of a mean streak to it. I guess that's why I never was a good prankster :P In the end most pranks are always making fun on the other's regard.

Still there were some neat bits of father daughter and mother daughter interactions here. The difference between Sparkel's relationship to both her parents is interesting to read about and it's good to read that Ice is not all icy and repulsive just .. different. She sure is a very interesting character with .. well different priorities. I did get the feeling that Ice dose care about Sparkle she just needs to have a hook.
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