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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-06-08
I liked this Slice of Life story! Instead of an epic confrontation, you bear witness to Foxtail's everyday low level unhappiness with Wispersilk's neglect. And Beetle not wanting to judge her mother! It must bother her not to know who the baby's father is, and how that would work growing up, when he's potentially related to anyone in the tribe!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2016-01-18
I'm so sorry for not commenting on this years ago :( Funny how time flies. I love this story, though I must say that in the beginning I thought it was going one way, it was neat how it went another. :) I like Beetle's reticence to talk about herself and her questions here. I also appreciate how well Foxtail really did know her mother!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-06-30
I really like how much the sense of "family" weaves through this story (and how fitting!), not just in one way, but in many branching ways. Both daughters are such contrasts with their mothers! I also really liked the detail of Beetle's burning curiosity about the cub's unknown sire… how you sense that it's something she wishes she could figure out an experiment to test, but she's stymied by practical considerations (not least, the cub not being born yet!). I sensed in her pat, socially-acceptable answer an underlying sense of acceptance only because she couldn't figure out how to discover the answer. Very Beetle. :)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-13
This really compared Beetle and Foxtail to one another nicely, as well as their relationships to their mothers. You said a lot without putting it exactly into words, which is nice for the reader to pick up on instead of having it spelled out. Poor Foxtail, ever feeling good enough, and poor Whispersilk as well, not knowing how to connect with her daughter outside of her own favorite pastime. And Beetle, always on the look out for another experiment to do - with whatever she can get her hands on appearently XD
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2013-05-09
This family moment and contrast between mother/daughter relationships is lovely to read, and also leaves me wanting to just see more of Foxtail and Beetle together! Plus -- it's lovely to see Whispersilk again here. It's a reminder of what the tribe has lost -- and leaves me wanting to ask: has the swaddling cloths gift tradition survived Whispersilk through Foxtail? Is it just a pleasant memory now? Or has Dreamflight possibly taken up the tradition?
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2013-04-28
I really love the interaction here - you can tell Beetle is very familiar with Foxtail's moods and can read her very well. I think it does Foxtail good to have her around! I also loved how well Foxtail was able to predict her mother's actions. Somehow, despite some undertones pointing to her feelings of inadequacy, it felt very loving how she spoke of her, which was very nice to see. Altogether, a very lovely slice of life!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-04-28
It's kinda neat how calm and down to earth Beetle is with Foxtail around. It really get's home that Foxtail is a little bit more the entertainer and wants some spotlight, while Beetle is more the pragmatical thinker and doesn't let the things Foxtail says drag her somewhere she might not want to go with her mind (like being not her mother's youngest anymore).
The interaction shown between the daughters and their mothers and how daughters and mothers interacted with each other were nice as well.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2013-04-28
Great look back at the past. I love how Beetle can read Foxtail's expressions and moods so well. It's fantastic to see the situation through their eyes!
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